Anchees

A kind of an uninteresting topic that seemed rather incomplete in the end. I think you could have done a much better job with the characters of the story.

Hi, I liked your poetry. That One can be truly awoken (awaken)

Hi, Very good, very touchingly dramatic. Keep it up.

Your opening line is not understood as it brings out no meaning and the grammar is bad. "Her Traces back to times........." (not understood)

Very, very good. I enjoyed the poem. Really very romantic and very well written. Would love to read some more of your work. Shabash and keep it up

That is really good. You are really imaginative and can put your imaginative thoughts to paper extremely well. Very well written with the punctuation marks in place. Achees

I think the word electricity in a love poem seemed a bit unromantic. You could probably replace it with 'shudder' or 'shiver' or 'sparkle' which may be more romantic. Anchees

Thanks Rachel and Pudin for reading my posts and commenting on them. I feel very secure with my writing now, knowing that I can write, and even if there are ...

Hi thelastofhisclan, A wonderful poem with a very good rhythm to it. Being a musician, I can even feel the tune. Anchees (India)