Alteran

Adam’s Messenger flashed red. He was meeting with the Boss and the other CCF members involved in the Fred incident. He glanced at it to see the words: Priority One ...

O_O uhh......I dont know what to say. Very dark. Makes you think twice about abortion. I like it :)

Sweet! I love Supernatural. You described it well for people who've never seen it. I Think it's great and I hope you finish it :D

:( Poor Corrie. So sad....You did a great job. Totally got across the emotion in a short amount of space.

Cliff hangerer by nature, fun. Love it, running to read the next ones :D

Jacob must DIE!!! Jared must DIE!!! BAH! Very good, very sad. Everything seems to be going to hell. I love it. Hopefully some sort of happy ending can be found ...

But if you switch points of view in a chapter you can use the * * * Screen break.

Adam Dashed for the transporter. He had to stop them from using....Fred. He placed his hand on the steel wall. An error message appeared: "Your comment is either to complex ...

The chorus rang out. TSR simple crumbled away as the new YWS rose from it's sleep. The Great Leader nate had returned to save his people. The smite stopped. the ...

Imelda, I know that you're not saying what you're saying to be mean but some of your crit is a bit unnedded. For one thing this is the fantasy forum, ...

That was good. That dream sequence was done very well. meaning in random is hard to do but you pulled it off well :) And i like your descriptions.

holy snoot. I'm really enjoying this. I feel i should say more but i cant see anything new to comment :)

Yeah the girl was very creepy.... *continues to try and invade the computer and kill Jared.* I hope Tea does it. I realy hope she slits his throat or something. ...

Very cool. I though it was great the way it was but you have to like it for others to like it.

Holy crap! I cant believe I've never read your stuff before, this was amazing. I was like on the edgeof my seat the whole time. Nicholas seems like a not ...