Alteran

Two pods drifted off of the Highwind’s marred hull. Red flashes streaked through the nebula and struck them. A blinding flash followed as a powerful shockwave caused the Highwind and ...

None of you are really offering her any help. Yes it needs fleshing out a bit but how so? Your idea is blurry at best. It is dificult to understand ...

I enjoyed it. It does need a better rhythm, as Clau said. You picked a rhyme sceme and stuck with it which was nice. Not all poems have to be ...

Meh. Sorry but it wasn't much to me either. I liked it and it was nice but it's been done. A bit repetitive and your flow stumbles quite often. No ...

Nice thought. I'd be cool to hear the tune. You missed an R in the last Extrodinary of the second to last verse.

Nutty waved her Spork over Adam. It glittered white sparkles of light as the wounds healed. “That should do it,” she said, moving on to the next crewmember. The Highwind ...

I've tried like 5 times to download it but it's not working.

Aww, that's cool. Nice use of words in a creative and thougtful way. :D

Looks good. Your Grammar looks great. The way you write draws me in far enough that I cant stand it when it stops. Gah! Waiting for more

*hugs Bubbles* Thanks!

To be far this isn't really the poem Whence critted. But I think we can all agree Adam's poem = doo doo poo poo.

Well, I'm not sure why this is in NaNoWriMo, since this is June not November. For now I'm moving it to Other Fiction. You can PM me if you want ...

“Intruder Alert. Intruder Alert.” Chimed the Computer, “Activating level 5 lockdown. Sealing bulkhead doors. Releasing all internal turret defense systems.” “Damn,” said Adam, “Everyone,

Do I have to? Can't I just forget I wrote it? *Smacks head on desk* I wrote what?

Editied and finished. Took me long enough. Any thoughts or comments are appreciated.