Alpha

Oooops colour fail :)

Awww....

Oooooops. Image Fail. It was supposed to be this:

That was BEAUTIFUL. Jash, you're an inspiration! YAY! Young and talented artist FTW!

Thanks for your opinion. The thing is that this is part of a novella. The things you mentioned are explained with detail in previous chapters (which I haven't published yet).

Lovely. THANKYOU NATE!

Very touching. I totally loved it. Dark, emotional, blah blah blah... Hope you write more! Cheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeers Alpha.

Hello Alpha. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on your story. She brushed her hair away, the sweat on her face making ...

Hey, Kathy! Thanks a lot for your opinion, it means a lot to me cos this song is so personal... I'm glad you enjoyed it, and hopefuly, someone else will, ...

Aw :( Is it that bad?

awesome, it gave me goosebumps! The idea that this is a dream is cool, and I don't think the idea is used before. I'm not really good at grammar, so ...

Thanks, both of you!

Thanks, Lele253isme! Glad you liked it!

Thanks you guys! One last comment: I would tone down the "intensity" of your story. It's overwhelmingly serious in a way. Possibly tone it down with some dialogue, a funny ...

Okay, now it's much better! You're a very talented writer, and with reading and practice, you'll make it in the big world in no time(should you decide to become an ...