Alora

I was truly drawn into this story. The first paragraph was wonderfully descriptive and quite gripping for an opener. I think your words flow nicely and there are several sentences ...

Hi, I thought I'd review as I like the possibilities, but I noticed a few things...the opening sentence is great, it catches my attention straight away. Her angst in the ...

I liked the eeriness in this story, particularly the ending. With the descriptions, I could picture the ballroom atmosphere. I also liked your descriptions of the girl. However there was ...

I was intrigued by this first chapter, quite riveting! Both scenes held enough tension to have me yearning to read more. Like others have suggested, this chapter could be longer. ...

This certainly tugged at my heart strings. I thought the first verse was very effective and further down, I was particularly drawn to the line; 'No more days will hold ...

(I'm new at reviews so please bear with me) This piece made quite an impression on me! I could really feel the girl's acceptance of her fear, more a sense ...

I liked how this piece opened with a moment that all readers can relate to, and then twists to reveal the person's apprehension. I could feel a sense of defeat ...

I enjoyed this, I could easily get a grasp of the character in such an intoxicated state. I don't know much about giving reviews but the only thing I noticed ...