Alliaaryn5665

Hi, Well done! It was mostly an easy, comfortable read. I liked it. It was sad, confused, and wonderous all at the same time. Maybe that's just me. There should ...

Hi, I am so proud that someone has had the guts to do this. I think you did very well[with the "Oh yeah!" being a nice touch.], though there was ...

Hi, There were a bit of mistakes here and there, but you did pretty well. Some grammar, I believe I saw a spelling, and a few other things. Make sure ...

Hi, So, yeah, keep writing. Don't read this, just write. There were many mistakes, a few typos, wrong tense, you get the idea. Instead of saing 'his name', you should ...

Hi, I just realized that I've stumbled upon this before! Oh my! I do, however, have some critiquing to do. The poem could, overall, stand without the first two lines(stanza ...

Hi, I would first like to say that I really enjoyed this. I don't think that the first line fits in, let alone flow, with the rest of the poem. ...

Hi, This is a brilliant idea. Good job! The format is phenominal, but the punctuation is iffy. You repeated secrets in stanza four which was unnessasary. Near the end there ...

Hi, On line six, stanza one, you said 'has went', which is a grammatical error, you should change it to either 'has gone' or 'have went'. I really liked lines ...

Hello friend, Bravo. This piece really teaches a valuable lesson and can actually give someone a confidence boost. You are 100% right about how society labels people and also how ...

Hi, What?! No capitalization whatsoever. No commas, spelling errors, sentences are too long, apostrophes. PAY ATTENTION!!! NO detail, and absolutely pointless. Was there supposed to be a lesson? How w

Hi, Oh my goodness. Oh my goodness, Oh my goodness. Oh my goodness. Oh y goodness. OH MY GOODNESS! I have fallen in love with this! There are a few ...

Hi, While I see where you were going with this, I can't help but to say damn. There are so many errors, it is hard to follow, there is hardly ...

Hi, Personally, while I find this somewhat true and relateable, I find this very rude and offensive. I think mayne you should have worded it differently. While I am not ...

Hi, Personally, to make this even more fantastic, you should have kept going!! You should not have just cut it off there. It feels like a surprise ending. Kind of ...

Hi, I didn't even have the power to finish this. I am sorry. The first few sentences were a mess. You could have easily combinded them for stonger sentences and ...