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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Deleted 25

    I really love this poem, I just decided that I would make all spelling and grammar mistakes red so that you could see where they are so I copied the ...

    Jan 27, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Memorize

    This was a very nice poem, firstly I'd like to say that if there is a coma the next line should not be capitalized and not every line needs punctuation ...

    Jan 20, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Sweet Sweet Air

    I liked the poem although... and this might just be me.. I didn't really understand the meaning of it, you're probably wondering how someone can like something yet not understand ...

    Jan 19, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: WORST ENEMY

    I like the idea of the poem but I don't really like how it didn't rhyme at first until the second stanza and then it didn't much after that I ...

    Jan 11, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: We Are Strangers

    Okay, I loved the poem but like anyone I thought I'd give you some pointers you know things you could improve on and things that you did well. Okay, so ...

    Dec 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Alone

    I love the meaning of the poem that the person is otherwise alone but I find it very repetitive no one to tease and no one to taunt This was ...

    Dec 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Catastrophe

    I loved this poem, it was short, but to the point and it made sense. I just don't understand why you used dashes instead of comas, that's the only thing ...

    Dec 30, 2011
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Twilight *Contains excessive nagging and puke worthyness*

    I love this, although I'm not sure if it means that you would have ended twilight right there... I say this with caution for fear of being eaten alive by ...

    Dec 25, 2011
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Bella's 30th Birthday

    I thought this was a very nice story, I enjoyed reading it from the very start, Would I have married him? Probably Would I have become a vampire? Maybe. Did ...

    Dec 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Love turned to hate

    I love the poem but I would consider checking the punctuation and every line I noticed started with a capital letter, if there is a coma the line doesn't need ...

    Dec 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: She is

    First off, it was a lovely poem to read, just a few things to concider She is Blond hair, blue eyesg lossed lips, glistening smile. Straight teeth, pearly white 67 ...

    Dec 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A lost stone

    I enjoyed reading your poem, I would consider looking at your punctuation and fixing it. I am just a thrown away one this line made little sense to me, I ...

    Dec 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Innocence Untrue

    This was a very nice poem to read, I love how you have dialogue in there as well, this I find it very hard to do. She fell like a ...

    Dec 18, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Eight Years Late

    I love this poem so much, it reminds me of my friend but not so much as it should, you did a great job on the poem. The happiest memories ...

    Dec 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Don't tear me to pieces

    I like the poem although the 'I, I'm, and I've' should be capital of the time and it's only capitalized, shreds is spelled wrong in the last stanza. how i ...

    Dec 15, 2011


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