AliceDreams

I really like this, but I feel that you're being limited by your rhyme scheme and I agree with Story Weaver. It may be that it doesn't even need to ...

This is either absolutely brilliant or just a bit naff. I honestly can't work it out. Maybe I'm verging towards brilliant, hmmm...

Hi DiskElemental! Thank you for posting this, I really enjoyed reading it. I found overall that it flowed very nicely and the suspense of Hazel's character was held well, with ...

Wow, this is great! I actually felt like I could only let go of my breath once I'd finished reading. I've never had a panic attack, but the metaphors you ...

Hi Hannah! I have to say, I'm not a great poetry expert, but I thought I'd have a little look. I think the poem contains some lovely singular metaphors, such ...

Hey! Thought I'd come and check out your writing! It's great but you definitley need to write more - I want to know what's happens!I really like Brock's character as ...

This is great! I love the sentence "patience is a virtue, but a virtue she lacked", I think it gives a very simple but great insight into her character. I ...

This is great! You have such an amazing vocabulary and I really enjoyed such detailed description of minor aspects, I think it gives the piece so much more depth. However ...

Hiya! This is my first review, so I'll do my best: I feel that the story has really good potential and I'd love to see Xander's character expanded upon, it ...