Alice

Trevor wasn’t in school on Monday. Carolina could have thrown a party. One less of her "[/colors]tormentors[color=red]" meant that she had one more class period of peace, even if it ...

When Mother died, it was a tragic year for all of us. We had known that she was destined to die in the early weeks of January, but she departed ...

A hand is the perfect girlfriend, Is it wrong that the first thing came into my mind was perverted? Yes if you weren't intending that, no if you were. Ronald ...

The world is fucked up nice description words but very plain perhaps change it to "pretty damn fucked up" , Carolina Smith thought as she sat down in her second ...

Hi Jabber! I'll post my overall comments at the end like I usually do because I never just read it through once to read it then go back and pick ...

I like it, and I found myself singing -yes singing-it in my head. I'm not even going to try to explain why I think its good because I'll just end ...

Mean kitty! I like it. All the story's that I've read told from a dog or cats perspective always convey as one evil and the other the heros. You didn't ...

Its too short, in the first chorus you said "my" instead of "me" but other than that, I love it. It's the sort of song I would write, just legnth ...

Hi, I don't know how to be nice at the beginning of critiques that part comes at the end, just so you're not discouraged with it. It was an average ...

A fairly enjoyable song, Its one that would defiently get stuck in my head, but it is short, maybe adding one more verse could solve that problem. It was also ...

*Steals Jacob plushie and huggles with the Edward and Jasper plushies* Can I help it? Jacob=awesome! Edward=Perfect! and I'm Alice so I just gotta love Jasper ^_^ But also Jacob=jerk ...

Okay taking into account that this was a haiku! (Didn't know that before) its actually rather clever, you just need to fix the puncuation and grammer a little bit and ...

Ahh, my first posted poem. Many comments appreciated, for there is much room for improvement. =3 For the love of God OMIT that! Never apologize for something you've written! (trust ...

Sudden screams and shrieks of pain split the silence that part just seems a tad akward to me... dark eyes sizzled with fury love the termonology right there. on the ...

Lets see, I won't be getting around to the general aspect of things near the end, I'm starting off with flow and such now. Service [s]had[/s] ended a while ago ...