wow. writing songs is so hard (at least i think it is) but you did really well. good work! <3
*this song just sort of popped into my head. I've included the music, so if you're at all musically minded, you'll get a rough idea of the tune (btw # is the closest my pc gets to a sharp sign). I've got a sneaking suspicion that the music sounds a little too familiar - please tell me what it's really from if you recognise it!*
Without You
Lyrics
Verse 1;
I know I did you wrong
Please forgive me
I’m trying to be strong
When you’re with me
I’m stifling my sigh and my tears
Trying not to cry out my fe-ars
But if you’re really gonna go
Then baby it’s time that you know
Chorus;
I aint gonna lie to you
Oh baby please belie-hieve me
I don’t wanna die so soon
But I will if you lea-heave me
I know I won’t survive
Yes it’s true
No point in being alive
Without you
Without you-hoo-hoo-hoo-oo
Without you
Verse 2;
I’m sitting all alone in my hallway
Can’t help but watch the phone
Just call and say;
“I’m not gonna leave – I forgive you”
But please don’t te-ell me that we’re through
Just say that you’ll stay here with me
Because I don’t wanna go free
Chorus;
I aint gonna lie to you
Oh baby please belie-hieve me
I don’t wanna die so soon
But I will if you lea-heave me
I know I won’t survive
Yes it’s true
No point in being alive
Without you
Without you-hoo-hoo-hoo-oo
Without you
Music
Verse;
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B D C# A
C F# E D C# D
B D C# A
C F D# C# C C# A# C# C
F# E D C# D B D C# A
B C D# E D# E D# E
A# C# C# E D# C D# D
Chorus;
F# E D C# D E C#
B C# E F C# F# G# A
F# E D C# D E C#
A# C C# E C F G G#
D# G F D# D D#
C D# D
D# G F D# D D#
C D# D
C D D# A# G F# E
C B C
wow. writing songs is so hard (at least i think it is) but you did really well. good work! <3
You might want to find an administrator to move this to the "Lyrics" section; you've currently got it housed in "Lyrical Poetry," which is not at all the same thing. Read the description for more information.
A fairly enjoyable song, Its one that would defiently get stuck in my head, but it is short, maybe adding one more verse could solve that problem. It was also hard to read because of how you put the dashes in the middle of words, but I wouldn't worry too much about that since its lyrics and people don't look at lyrics very often. Unless of course you're me.
All in all it was a good song, but you need to write what instrument the music sounds best in, first instinct was the gutiar second piano third flute (I play flute I'm bias).
Good song.
I loved the song! But I think you might have had an error in your grammer. You put "pint" and I think you ment to put "point." Still, if this was in an album, I'd buy it! 
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