Alice

I walk through the hallways of my mundane high school, my best friend at my side. Jordan trailed off, not looking that worried. I laughed as we sat down at ...

Hey! He was my best friend, and his happiness came before mine—self-sacrificing person that I am, I mused, tucking a strand of hair behind my ear. I had helped him ...

Prok, First, thanks for the email about this, chances are I would have totally missed it without it. Now onto the matters at hand... "Someone's cooking," you say, and your ...

Heya, you gave this to me and critiqued something of mine so I figured it was only fair. nights when disturbance doesn’t come easily, Something about that just seems off ...

You should have told him. No. Why? He would never understand. He loves you. He doesn’t know what they did to me. They’re gone now. They won’t hurt you anymore. ...

It made your blood run cold. "Your" should be "hers" I think. It was just a dream. It was just a dream. Saying it twice is repetitive, but if you ...

“Goodbye.” The single simple word, which should not have affected me in the least, caused my heart to give an unexpected lurch of pain, as I stared at the dangerous, ...

Alirght right off the bat I'm going to say poetry's not my strong suit, but I'm going to give it my best shot. I liked this poem, its got the ...

Hi my single celled friend! I love your description in the first three sentences, I've only got one bone to pick with those ones. a depressing contrast of beauty and ...

First thing I noticed: It's too repetitive for my liking, not only with the words but with how often you do the chorus. It should be spread out a little ...

Twas too short, was it just one of those random inspiration things that if you forced more it would suck? (like many of mine?) For how long it is it's ...

I liked this, it had a good rythm and had good termonology. My only problem was it didn't do anything for me . Poetry is supposed to not only move ...

special and... and I know that You said and twice, it throws off the flow a tad I think. Do you see the trance that I am in? Sounds better ...

Okay the first thing I noticed when I opened this...I couldn't read it. It looks like jibberish! If it messes up, fix it. But from what I can see it ...

I liked it, its got a lot of potiental. I won't bore you with more of the grammer rubbish because I see that razor's taken care of that. The bone ...