Alfreto

I don't think I've ever read the story from the monster's point of view except for Monsters Inc that is. But this one really brought me in to what it ...

I was starting to read the beginning of this and scrolled down ahead of time, prepared to go ahead and dig into a long keep on rolling page or two, ...

I liked your second one almost as much as I did the next. Don't listen to what anyone else says about the writing style without much detail and everything else. ...

I Love this! (: I loved how you made it into a poem form; it kept the reader at the beat you wanted them to read the story. Very creative. ...

Welcome to YWS! :) My name is Aly-son and I am honored to be your very first critic. Let me start by saying that I'm simply giving my general opinion ...

[quote["Hey, Cammy." I said giving him a hug. [/quote] You need to change the period into a coma at the end of all your diologue when clarrifying who said it. ...

Ok first I think it would be considerate of me to welcome you to YWS (: I'm Alyson and I will be one of your critics. The very first thing ...

Wow! This was really good! Wasn'y expecting that ending at all. Except the beging after the short intro. I don't know what was about it, but it just didn't really ...

I agree with the critic above. You have a really neat plot going on here, but it seems a bit rushed. I like the conflict you have with the boyfriend's ...

This story is written differently than what most writters like to make it. But when I say, "different", I mean different in a good way. I liked it. You written ...

I didn't read your first one, but your new one is really good :) I like your created world (really creative!) Your story line was amazing and very interesting to ...

ok first of all I would like to say that I really enjoyed reading this and honestly did not expect that twist in the end ! but there was some ...

I completely see where your coming from =] Love is amazing but there will heartbreak. I think theres a point after awhile when your with the right person you'll know. ...

Hey I'm Alyson and I will be your reviewer today =] This is a cute little poem; I loved it !!!! It was rather short, but alot of poems are ...

Hey I'm Alyson =] I'll get to the critical stuff first. “I’m sorry, Beth. Will you forgive me?” He says, his dark brown eyes digging holes into mine. Ok I'm ...