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Re: TITLE COMING SOON - prologue
Good evening, Generally I don't like reading any fantasy romance these days, after all of the twilight hype has sort of ruined the genre, for me anyway. I though it ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: The Cold Hurts
This poem read excellently, i have a cuple of tiny things, ut thier more of a personal feel than an actual issue with the writning. Well done, I wanted to ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: Castle on a Hill- Chapter 3
Hello! thank you for reviewing my story :) ton return the favour: I have not read the other chapters of this story, but i actually think that this chapter is ...
Sep 23, 2011 -
Re: Be Not My World
This is an extreamly intersting piece of poetry. The comparison between natural forces and a person/actions are excellent and give a really unique feel to this poem. I have never ...
Sep 17, 2011 -
Re: The Swing
I thought that this poem was really original and did mimic the movement of a swing, it gave you that steady feeling of motion . My only issure is just ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: 2 Years
I really loved this. i agree with the above comments about the repetition of you, but otherwise beautiful job! the emotion was really clear and the whole piece had that ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: :Flashes: (work in progress)
I agree with the review above, there is certainly something with this idea, but i think its a little too much. I dont get why she would pick this lyndon ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: Rebel Monster
I thought that this was very interesting. I didn't completly understand what it was you were writting about, a phycological battle or a sort of dilusion, or even just ineternal ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: Simple Beauty
This reminded me a lot of myself! haha, not in the beautiful or graceful way, more just of the view of the world. The peace when you are outside and ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: I
I think this is a very intersting peice. You used a great vocabulary, but i thought at points it drowned out the message of the poem. This line inparticular "Its ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: I Hate Math... and I Hate the Library
I thought this was a really cute little story. I giggled at the end when she fell, and i definatly wish something like this would happen to me. Your characters ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: The Fallen, The Brave
I really thought that this was an interseting poem, and it was clear from the begining what you were talking about. I liked all the short descriptive linnes of key ...
Sep 13, 2011 -
Re: I Remember
I think this is an amazingly emotive piece of writing, i remeber similar feelings from when i saw the footage of the towers. I dont really have constructive points, but ...
Sep 13, 2011 -
Re: Opening the door
This peom is short but it captures the mood of the piece well for three stanzas. I like the confliction between the "Real you" and what you have been taught- ...
Sep 13, 2011 -
Re: MUNERA Prologue (1)
Hello- I thought this was a good prologue. It made a little of a slow start but i understood that you were setting up the seen, and i thought your ...
Sep 13, 2011
