AlexRichardson06

An interesting concept. Some of the rhyming is placed funny as it isn't a consistent feature throughout the poem and seems to appear in slightly random places however when it ...

Brilliant content as a starter-lay and with more work could be an excellent piece. The biggest problem I have with this piece is the lack of paragraphs makes reading the ...

The story has potential, it just needs developing more. Perhaps writing from Jason's or his parent's point of view may be a better angle to deliver the story as this ...

An interesting idea, slightly hard to follow in places however with work it could progress into something. I'd try to make it obvious at the beginning that the protagonist is ...

First of all, I laughed at the last paragraph which immediately ticks the 'purpose box'. Very clever and I could imagine what was going on but didn't know how you ...

An unpredictable piece but something that I believe most young, bright people will be able to completely relate to. The stresses of school are beyond what I could ever have ...

Very calming and relaxing to read however I have one major issue with this piece. Paragraphs! Introducing paragraphs to this story will organize the whole piece and will make it ...

I have to say, I thought it was an essay to begin with whereby you moaned about the lack of ideas and although it gives off that feeling at the ...

Overall, I enjoyed the plot although at times found myself reading over parts again to make sure I followed the story line however as this is a short story it ...