Alainna

Hello there. Your piece caught my eye yesterday and I read it but ran out of time to crit it. So here I am! First off, I think you have ...

Hey, sorry for the delay. Many technical difficulties and then just complete incompetence (on my part completely). Now that I'm here it seems that everyone else has beaten me to ...

Heya, I'm here and I'm ready for part two! OK, this may sound annoying but for the purpose of posting on YWS, you may want to make these a bit ...

Hi, sorry for the delay. First off, I apologise if I repeat anything that the others have said - as they critiqued as attachments I have no idea what has ...

Hey, sorry for taking so long. I'm not too hot on critiquing poetry (as I said) but because you asked I'll try my best. Subject and Style I liked the ...

Heya. First off, I enjoyed this part and I liked the fact that we get to see things from Sarah's point of view - I wasn't sure if we would. ...

I made it! Right, I don't want to go over any nit-picks that others have found so instead I'm just going to give you an overall review on characters and ...

Hey Demeter! I definitely don't want to wear spinach-coloured granny slippers even though they'd felt good". I think that 'they'd felt good' is a bit confusing and just doesn't flow. ...

Hey Ink. First off, I liked the simplicity of this. It flowed well and the fact that it was short works to its advantage. I’d rather try than die. The ...

Hello there. This had a lot of lovely imagery and I could very easily imagine being there. She knew she was. But still she could still feel his rank breath, ...

Hey there. A few things: she leaned back Capital 'C'. All she could think about is why she felt so miserable. 'Is' should be 'was'. I mean, she had a ...

I really liked this. I liked the way that you used the painting as a metaphor for the relationship and use of second person made the piece a lot more ...

Hi there Alice! You have some good ideas and I like the concept of a friend who nothing seems to go right for. I agree with the previous critiquer when ...

Hi there! First off, there is potential in your writing and you do have the beginnings of a fantasy novel here. Good start! And the powerful, delightful group who all ...

Hey Camille, I made it after all!! First off, I really enjoyed this and I would very much like to be on the List. I liked the way you described ...