WOW! that was bleeding amazing! I am really, impressed.
My favorite stanza was:
Eimear wrote:Open the windows,
air the smell of death
off their sweaty skin,
come on now, less of that,
we won’t have any tears here.
There’s a good boy.
Especially
we won't have any tears here.
There's a good boy.
It touches me quite a bit. That in the midst of all the havoc and chaos, this child is denied the right to cry. Sadly, very British.
I like how you chose not to describe how the quake took place, or what it was like. Instead, writing about the aftermath - which is of course so much more evocative and humanly invested. I am impressed.
Very nice job! i think you have a very good chance at winning that competition...Unless the royal poet laureate has entered lol
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