Alainna

I've just finished reading it. I don't think it was as good as My Sister's Keeper or Mercy. To me the ending was a let down and I think it ...

Hey Mark - first I'll give you some nit picks and whatnot and then I'll comment on the piece overall. Witness the days of solitude nibble away at his mind. ...

I really liked the concept behind this poem and although it was repetitive, it worked well as a short, perfectly bundled together piece. A few things to consider: With rickety ...

Hey Conrad, This was an intriguing piece from the start and although I don't know what the context of the contest is, I'm sure you'll do well. A few nit-picks: ...

Hey Jared, I'm sorry this has taken so long. A few things: The clouds in the sky threatened a power outage, which I really didn’t want to happen, especially now. ...

I made the fatal mistake of reading this book on a busy beach - tearing up in public is never good. I think there was a bit too much hype ...

Hey there! OK, so first off, my general impressions of the piece. I'm not really into this sort of genre of writing and I have to say that the poem ...

Hey again! Old, frayed curtains hang limply on the windows, but they do not seem to have any purpose, as the glass is boarded up. Get rid of the comma ...

I'm very behind on these and so I'm making an attempt to catch up! She stands next to a small platform in the front of the old, closed-down bookstore and ...

Hey there and welcome to YWS! If you'd like to discuss the Twilight series, please go here . You'll find lots of opinions there already and I'm sure you'll find ...

Hey there. First off, some general comments: I stared at him as he sat behind his desk, his chair squeaking against the linoleum floor. I feel like there should be ...

Heya Sarah, You have yet another intriguing and absorbing part here. A blur of coloured Christmas lights arc between the happy faces of people laughing, talking, enjoying themselves There's nothing ...

Hey Jared, Although your writing is good, this part seemed a little rushed - like you're starting to get fed up with the series and are trying to get it ...

Hey Sarah, First off, I'm really getting into this. Broken has such a personal touch to it - all the emotion conveyed is what makes this piece as amazing as ...

I'm sorry it's taken me so long to crit this, Jared. I'm glad I finally got my act together and read it. The others have already pointed out most of ...