Adriana12Alexis

This is a good story line, I've only read one book similar to this, so good job on originality. Jayden is kind of a conflicting character, he lives in the ...

I have to agree with Lycando, this would be much better as a prologue. You also don't have spaces where spaces need to be. Especially in those last two sentences. ...

Nice writing, it's kind of choppy though. Your story needs better sentence flow. I like it, but it's just too much, kind of like your trying to hard. Your story ...

I've got pretty much nothing original. You reviewed my work, so I thought I'd return the favor. I really like this story. You are a good writer. You have a ...

Hey, I like the story. It could be a bit better though if you add more depth. The whole thing kind of seems too cardboard, too flat. You also have ...

This is a really good piece. Better than some published pieces I've read. I honestly am having a very hard time finding things to change about it. The only thing ...

I like the story. I hope you write more of it. My critiques for it so far though are this: you should double check your work next time. In the ...

I like the poem. I like the whole empowering yourself theme. I am definitely for the women power part. The only thing wrong with the poem was the grammatical errors. ...

I really like this piece. I like how you compare the song to the ocean. It's a free form poem, so the format is fine, but I think the poem ...