Adriana

Okay, I'm crying right now!! What an amazing, sensitive, LOVELY, well constructed poem... It made me remember MY dear grandpa and how we used to sit together to see the ...

Oh, my gosh! What an amazing poem! First of all, I must say I love it because it is full of emmotion... I felt just like your character, and this ...

*-* Oooh, you almost made me cry!! I just love the repetition of the lines: And at your birth he will not show At your birth he will not know ...

Hi, Yushi! I liked your poem, but I think there are some puctuation missing... I had always known that he was never mine , but my heartbeat had already started ...

It is really good! Congratulations. "Here it is Harry, platform 93/4.", Neville quickly turned back around. He saw a man with messy black hair pointing between platforms 9 and 10. ...

What an amazing poem!! Seriously, I love how you make the time pass at each stanza. But I really think there are missing commas... Hi, mommy. You don’t know about ...

Amazing poem! Congratulations! I love the fact the it doesn't rhyme but still flows nicely. I tell myself that it'll pass and know it's a lie. It doesn't go away; ...

Oh, this is great! I just think that stanzas are needed here. My idea is: I lay and look up at my ceiling because it is the only thing i ...

Hi! Welcome to the YWS! I just loved your poem! The descriptions you made are really good, it flows perfectly. And the end is so nice! A silent tear escaped ...

First of all, I loved this!! But I don't like how it looks... Maybe you should write like this: The stick burns, ashes fall. I see your face in the ...

Hi, Vettan! First of all, I so loved your poem! The time has stopped, she came to visit And silently was standing by the door She did not move, nor ...

Hi, Jalmoc! I really liked your story. It is full of emotion and the imagery is great! My favourite line were I watched as leaves fell around me, circling in ...

I so love it, Soulkana!! I love the way you introduced the girls. It is lovely... Paling she glances at me and then at the ground. “My name is Perdita ...

I SO LOVE IT! Your story is so breath taking, and perfect! I couldn't stop reading it and almost cried at the end. I mean, I thought the story had ...

Oooh, I love it! I know the subject is sad but you made it sound sooo... lovely. There is something captivating in your poem and I liked it really much ...