Bride in Black Veil

Hi, Vettan!
First of all, I so loved your poem!

Vettan wrote:The time has stopped, she came to visit
And silently was standing by the door
She did not move, nor spoke, nor made a sign
But still I reached to grab her cold and lifeless hand

This is really good! When you say "her cold and lifeless hand" we have the feeling that there's something wrong there.

Vettan wrote:No longer do I know or can recall the reason
It is my heart but not my mind that reflects my soul
I guess her company was all I needed,
Deserted and betrayed by all

I'm not sure I got the idea of this stanza, but maybe it is my fault. And I loved the line "It is my heart but not my mind that reflects my soul".

Vettan wrote:I did not seek forgiveness, nor acceptance
It had no reason to remember names of those I loved
She was my bride; her kiss was all I needed
To close my eyes and to forget this sinful world

I really like this stanza too!!

Vettan wrote:Reflecting back I think I understand now
The shadow that lurked deep within her smile
Next time when she will come to visit
She’ll stretch her hand and I’ll return that smile back

Well, to be honest, I didn't think the first line fits... It doesn't flow.

Oh, and the title is soo good! It captures everyone's attention.

Congratulations for your work! It is amazing!
Keep writing

Hey, I really liked this!
I read it because the title sounded interesting. You hooked the reader right in at the start, so well done. Overall I really liked the feel and general topic of this poem; it's sad, but intriguing, and very open to interpretation which I like.
A few nit-picks:

I did not seek forgiveness, nor acceptance
It had no reason to remember names of those I loved
She was my bride; her kiss was all I needed
To close my eyes and to forget this sinful world

I felt like "to" wasn't really needed.

I looked her in the eyes and then she smiled
But turned her pale face away from mine
My vows and pleads of love have vanished
With #FF0000 ">the only woman I have thought I ever loved

Reflecting back I think I understand now
The shadow that lurked deep within her smile
Next time when she will come#FF0000 ">s to visit
She’ll stretch her hand and I’ll return thatsmile back

Some parts I really liked were

It is my heart but not my mind that reflects my soul

I just really liked the sound of that sentence, also

The time has stopped, she came to visit
And silently was standing by the door
She did not move, nor spoke, nor made a sign
But still I reached to grab her cold and lifeless hand

Good job on the first stanza, very attention-grabbing.

Overall well done, really liked it. Keep writing!

I liked the topic of this poem. It almost made me think of Ms. Havisham from the novel Great Expectations by Charles Dickens. However, there were some spelling errors that need to be corrected, and some words that seemed to be missing, which was a bit distracting for me whilst I was reading. One more thing:

Reflecting back I think I understand now
The shadow that lurked deep within her smile
Next time when she will come to visit
She’ll stretch her hand and I’ll return that smile back

I'd like to see this last paragraph extended. What was the reason behind the shadow in her smile? And also..if there's a "sequel" to this, when would she come back? Those are just musings of mine. Regardless, happy writing.