Adnamarine

Yeah, the ending is almost always my problem. What if I just ended at "watching civilization put down roots." I feel like the idea I half started at the end ...

This is one of the more stunning pieces I have read recently, really beautiful. The word choices are especially effective and really make the piece. They aren't overdone or too ...

Hey guys! This is a really interesting conversation! Just remember this is in the literary forums! We like to keep discussions here centered around the quality of writing etc. and ...

Thank you for your honest review; it was incredibly insightful. I mentioned briefly in the description that I did not like how this poem turned out, that it sounds too ...

Oh 100%! I try to make my reviews helpful to the writer's poetry in general...though this sounded a bit more specific I realize. But you can, hopefully, take it and ...

I've certainly written poetry for myself alone, just because I needed to get something out. But if it "wasn't even written for other people to read," why did you post ...

Charleston No one lives here. Shop-keeps drive in from tiny towns and put up in shabby motels on the east side, away from swept streets and deceptive traffic, and lofty ...

Eleven Crouched on the edge of the ceramic bathtub at midnight, waiting to be discovered. She can hear snatches of their voices, her parents, cutting in and out like a ...

Mommy It sounded like you were pouring rock music down the garbage disposal, tearing up the raunchy rebellion with a speeding blade and pouring it down their throats as baby ...

Open your eyes (I hate the first line.) Finding lots of change today, Brown, green, silver clanging, shivering; Cold, and hard, and old, and imprinted with the faces of the ...

His Mind is My Thrift Shop He shops exclusively at Good Will, carrying his thoughts in a cheap plastic Dora backpack—this all-American boy who plays baseball and eats as much ...

Here's the original version of the story. Again, don't feel obligated to read it. It's over about 4 times longer than the other. But if you're curious and want to ...

Hey =) I think you were looking for a different spot actually. Here's the forum for actual lyrics. =)

Hey Shina, I apologize for not actually reviewing this, but maybe it would fit better in the lyrics section then?