Adnamarine

I'm torn between being intrigued by the structure, and enjoying the purity of just the words the way that you read them aloud (you have a lovely voice, by the ...

Hey AJ! To start out, I agree with nativecatcher about "amazeballs." I realize it said "your words" and you may or may not be capturing what an actual someone said, ...

Genwrit, I thought this was absolutely lovely! The setup is very unique, but it fits, it fits so well. I don't know if this was intentional, but you repeated the ...

The beauty and the struggle of short poetry is that it almost has to include some visual effects; it almost has to be concrete poetry. You've already illustrated that here, ...

One of the best things that I noticed about this poem is how well your thoughts flow together and fit, and smoothly transition from one to the next. There were ...

Titles are one of my weak points, for sure. I don't think there's necessary anything wrong with this title, but if you wanted to change it you could give it ...

It is difficult to use true rhyming in poetry without either sounding like a nursery rhyme, or awkward and stiff because the words don’t quite fit. Overall, I thinking the ...

Long time no see Jared =) Normally I don't like to do this, but I feel like a line by line (ish) might be the most efficient for this... or ...

Expo =) I didn't read the comments above, so if I repeat something... What I've always liked about your poetry is that you have such an original way of expressing ...

This reminds me of something I would write. I kind of assumed that you wrote this, on a day like this, and the pointless poem you were talking about was ...

I apologize for taking my sweet time getting around to this. =] But here I am. I haven’t read Rosey’s review, so I might repeat some things, but we’ll see. ...

Hi Alice! Here as requested. =] Your opening two lines aren't my favourite. Trying to put my finger on why, the best I could come up with is that they ...

Hey Jem! Here was requested. First of all, I'm not sure why you picked that form. You said yourself each stanza is in "haiku" form, but these aren't haikus, and ...

First of all, I think this would be easier to read if you divided it into stanzas. Maybe something like this: Before our death, we briefly thrive Enchanted, wild, free, ...

I was pleasantly surprised by this. I was underwhelmed by the first couple lines so I had low expectations for the rest of it, but it wasn't what I expected. ...