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Hi Kyllorac! I like this poem and I love the metaphor. I really think the only thing you have to work on is the enjambment. I almost feel as though ...

Hiya Tenyo! Well, I think we've unanimously decided that this is extremely creative and cute. Oh, boy, is it cute! However, I think it's lacking something. I'll use the first ...

Hi Hayley! My biggest question about this poem is, what's it about? You are stating this poem to someone else. Did the "you" in this poem die? Who is "she"? ...

Hi Fictionfanatic! You know the drill; I'll go through and edit some things, first. I didn't mean for anyone to get hurt. E s pecially not him. But no one ...

Hey Kitrosemon13! I'll start with the nitpicks, then get to the general aspect of the poem ... Alone in a world so unforgiving, losing all that's left of my humanity. ...

Hi Hibiscus! Are you kidding? Of course it's good! You can't keep thinking so negatively! Now, I'm going to edit this so you can be confident of your potential chance ...

Hi SilentRain. Hmm, February where I am is cold, snowy, and horrible. o_O But anyway. On with the review. Tranquil days, lazy days, under the sun that kisses the Earth. ...

Hi again, I think I'll just go through and edit the grammatical things ... I really couldn't afford to miss a day of work though, you need to understand that. ...

Hi Elinor Brynn! I know this is for the contest, so I'll take the opportunity to be rather frank: I felt no emotion. I once took a creative writing class, ...

Hi Ultraviolet! Since you're submitting this for the September contest, I'll just correct the technical, poetic stuff. I mean, if I told you to change something in the plot of ...

Hi Grassnony63! Welcome to YWS; I hope you'll get some good reviews here, a well as writing a few reviews, yourself. :wink: I didn’t know how to feel or even ...

Heybeccahey! I love how I can greet you just by stating your user-name. :D I really like the flow of this poem. There were no awkward pauses, and this shows ...

Hi Blossom! I hope you don't mind if I change the color back to black for now, because I like to highlight errors in red. :clap: Testing and luring my ...

Hi Cubesj! Welcome to YWS! I hope you will get some great reviews here, as well as do a bit of reviewing, yourself. The voice was loud, it echoed in ...

Aww, this is so said! I hope it isn't true! Okay, now, on to the review! You were strong through the years, Teaching me proper manners, And at people’s birthdays, ...