Abigail_W.

Fun fun fun! I love this poem! Hum hum hum! Drum drum drum! It makes me want to write in rhymes! The flow is excellent. It is so carefree. Whoop ...

I like this! It's short, funny, and to the point. I like the rhyme scheme. It almost has some of the qualities of a limerick. I've highlighted the things I ...

Hiya bluebird24. First of all, welcome to the wonderful land of the Young Writers' Society. I hope my critique isn't too hard on you -- in fact, you can totally ...

Hi there! I love the aim of this poem, as I am very much of an environmentalist. However, I see a few improvements that could be made ... The tears, ...

This poem has evident charm, and the only corrections I'll make are technical ones. I answer to him. And with little fingers he dabs His brush , in the paint. ...

I know why nobody has responded to this post yet -- they are speechless! This is extraordinary! What can I say? I have just one bit of criticism, and that ...

Very nice work! Since this is only two paragraphs, I'm just going to pick at the little things. You forget their eye color, the way they walked, or the sound ...

I like this, but it might be helpful if I knew what the prompt for the contest was. Since I really can't judge the writing itself without knowing exactly what ...

This is a beautiful and expressive poem, and I am eager to read more of your work. Drums beat colors that float to bleakness. Watch the cloud rumble through the ...

I absolutely love this poem. It's just so true! However, I have a few suggestions. :arrow: Perhaps you could edit the meter a bit; take out some syllables, replace some ...

Might I say that this left me speechless? This essence of this poem was just perfect. My only advice can be a quick correction of spelling, and a suggestion as ...

This is such a poignant poem! It is very bittersweet and sad. On a breezy autumn day A girl went out to play Her name was Delilah McLear Prettiest girl ...

This is a very nice poem, and you did an excellent job keeping the rhyme and the meter flowing easily. However, may I suggest you omit the use of elipses ...

I am surprised you wrote this when in a state of writers' block, because the imagery is spectacular. I though the story was about a robot. It feels like something ...

This is a beautiful poem, stuffed with imagery and metaphors I would never have thought of. When deciding whether an idea is original or not, I ask myself, "Would anybody ...