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That was so cute, WritingWords! It is so funny the things little kids will come up with. Sometimes, they think of really good story premises. I honestly think you should ...

Hi Jasmine Hart! I am usually sort of intimidated when it comes to reviewing the green guys' work, but I guess I'll give it a go. Whoa, there was a ...

Hi Persephoneia! I really like this poem. I like it quite a bit. ;) I wish I knew what you think I know this sounds a bit wonky, but this ...

Hi Allmixedup! Part one of this play proved to be fileld with interesting concepts, though I have a few improvements that you could make. :arrow: Italics are a very important ...

Hi Bluebird24! First things first, I love your avatar! The Smurfs rule! Now, onto the poem ... I really have just one criticism. Adjectives, adjectives, adjectives. They're everywhere, and they ...

Um, what Baywolf25 said! He just about summed it up. I just two little corrections. I'm not that five year old daughter anymore. Whether you change this or not is ...

For a seven-year-old's work, this is phenomenal! There is just one mistake, which I am sure is a typo; in the first line, you wrote "lonel" instead of "lonely." Did ...

Hi ScarlettFire! I love this poem! Moonlight flittered down Do you mean "fluttered," perhaps? Or maybe "flitted"? "Flittered" isn't a word -- but then again, in poetry, you can feel ...

Hi Virsanity! I have to agree with Iceprincess here; you are trying too hard to rhyme. Young as we are, older we journey so far. This line really didn't make ...

Hi Iceprincess! I love the idea of this poem! Brushing off some dust She cannot comprehend why Carousel died "Carousel died" is only four syllables. Raindrops start to fall Brushing ...

Hi Scien! Welcome to the Young Writers' Society! I must say, this is fabulous! Where did you get the inspiration to write this? I see just one (maybe two) mistake(s). ...

Hi Jon! I'll go through and fix spelling mistakes, etc. in red ... In the course of human souls - we shine effluvistically bright by the way the light shines ...

Hi Cyndaday95. As everyone else has said, capitalization is a must. I like the concept of this poem. I like everything about this poem. I just have one nitpick: to ...

Hi StoryWeaver13! I am certain this was not your first attempt at haiku. It simply can't be. You must secretly be sneaking haikus all around your house, stuffing little scraps ...

Hi Demoness! I hate to say it, but I find this poem to be rather bland. My heart: isn't the topic a bit overused? This seems like something you would ...