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Thanks for the review! Actually, the funny thing is that this chapter is we can say as a filler chapter which pretty much didn't affect the current storyline lol. Even ...

Thanks for the review! My plan with this chapter is basically just trying to fill in some more details behind the lore/history of the world. Its basically a filler while ...

Thanks. I will check it out

Thanks, you have really helped fix it quite nicely. So instead of turning it to all to past tense, I only keep the dream sequence in past tense while all ...

I never said Rito and Rion is the same person....

Yeah I actually do feel some sentences in this chapter feels out of place if not weirdly structured. But I'm just now sure how to fix it. I need some ...

Thanks, and about that comma after quotation mark thing is because its just how i was thought when writing dialogues back when i was a kid so it kind of ...

Uhhh if anyone have better name for that spell Elise made please tell me. I couldn't think of any better beginner wind type spell name but it seriously starting to ...

welp for the 5 year old writing part i just thought to make its grammar just a bit broken but i didn't thought about doing that. Thank you for sharing ...

woops damn I didn't realize those errors thanks for showing it to me!

Well, my plan is actually to jump around between the lore and history of the world with the main storyline to fill the gaps while also gathering more info that ...

Thanks for the tips! I actually didn't realize that the word infront isn't spaced out hahaha....I usually post my chapters early in a discord server so that my friends can ...

I forgot to add another point about how the people in this story are forced to stay home due to the weather, just like how we are forced to stay ...

Hahahaha. Same. Im new here too

Its a very interesting material to read. Most people would thought that being an immortal would be great but you have totally manage to point out the curse of immortality ...