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Thank you, Nate.

Much better. Now it seems like you're writing about something you've been holding back for a while, and now you want to let it out. I like it. I have ...

It's both, but it depends how you use it.

Oh, one last thing I forgot to write in my post. I really discourage changing first-person narrations from scene to scene; it really confuses the reader. -Alex

Wow. Not much I can say except that this is amazing. You're a really clever writer, this poem had a great flow to it, your wording was perfect, and it ...

Hi Mikko, sorry I took kind of a long time to get back to this. As requested, here are some of the spelling mistakes/other errors I noticed: I rushed out ...

I could help, but I don't really know what you want to write. Any guidelines?

I'm not nearly this cocky in real life. I don't know why, but something compelled me to write like this. It's just a side project off my novel, I don't ...

Excellent! I really have nothing else to say. This was so unique, that I don't find anything wrong with it. Welcome to YWS and keep up the great work! -Alex

Oh, that's okay. Haha, at this point, you're supposed to be confused. This is the end of the story chronologically, so the novel is about what leads up to this ...

I like it! It was funny, querky, and there's not much to critizize. Do you write other poems like this? -Alex

Definately your short story. It really grabbed me from the beginning, and you definately have potential writing prose. "Who's At Fault" is also good, and I think you should revise ...

Great. If you don't mind, could you check out the first chapter of this novel I posted? No one's commented yet. It's called "The Gold Watch", and you should find ...

Oh, thank you. Yeah, poetry is really hard for me, so I usually stick to short stories, unless I have something really good on my mind. I also find rapping ...

Oh. I just posted "lyrics" on this forum. Should it be moved?