So I wrote this mostly as a joke. I wish not to offend anyone in any way by how the fly 'lisps'. Being a joke, I don't expect any true reviews. I know full well how terrible the poem is.
(I can do better poetry, but this is an exaggeration.)
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I am a little fly
And I like to dance all night long
And shing a little shong.
Yesh, I have a lishp,
But I'm not afraid to say fish.
I am a little fly
With a little lishp.
I have two feet:
Each wear a cleat.
They fly with me...
Beshide me, you shee.
I am a little, lishping fly
With two sheparate feet.
I am a good little fly.
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Hahaha, I love this. Seriously.
Hahaha this is cute
I like it and I have a slight lishp its more like lissssssssssp with spit.LOL
I like it! It was funny, querky, and there's not much to critizize. Do you write other poems like this?
-Alex
XD Ketchup.
And thanks all
Lavvi
I wish to inform
mah wittle fwiend
Blue; there's nufin
wong wit chu~
do I wish
you'd not twi
wisps, cause Blue
dey goin be
da deaf o' ju.
Gimmicks are meh, but it was a joke. : )
3 kudos.
Very adorable for a joke poem. I adore lisps. it's almost like a british accent, you just want them to say more things. My best friend has a lisp and if you hang around him long enough you'll develop your own lisp. XDD
This was cute and quirky. Personally this poem to me doesn't mean much but it's just weird,funny and a little random. Great job, i believe you have done everything you wanted to achieve.
Maybe try six legs instead.
Yeah, it was cute, and funny... and, well, I sort of want to nitpick it and tell you which lines were unnecessary, and tell you something... I don't know, meaningful, or critical, but I'm afraid you will then roll your eyes and mutter darkly to yourself, "Didn't this idiot realize I was merely joking? That I did not want to hear any criticizations on my absolutely adorable fly poem?!" So, I won't criticize it, really, just give a quick opinion:
This was silly, but… not Shel Silversteen silly, like, you know, silly with a dark, twisted, deep underlying meaning that makes you go, “wow.” It was just… cute.
And, that’s probably all you wanted it to be. So, congrats XD
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Tabby