21WhiteRoses

This is awesome! I really love the concept. It would be so dull to live in a world without music. Although i guess it would be kinda fun playing music ...

This is pretty good! I really love the characters and their brotherly love. Also your descriptions are so vivid! I feel like I am out their with them! I really ...

your writing just blows my mind! I'm really loving this novel so far. I wanna know what happens next! My novel is really rather puny next to this haha!I adore ...

Wow I can tell you really put a lot of work into this. you really have a natural talent! I loved this story from the very first sentence!Your word choice ...

This is pretty good! I like how when you read it you aren't too sure whats going on. Mystery is a big plus in stories! The only grammar problems I ...

"Shhh... Let's go fall in love with fate, John." < Wow I really loved that line! This is a really wonderful peace! I love the feeling this couple creates. Very ...

This is pretty good! There are a few grammar errors and a spot or two where the sentences could flow better. Aside from that its great! One thing you could ...

This is really good! I like the concept a lot. However there are a lot of places where the words don't flow together well. There are many little words missing ...

Wow this made my day!I was entertained the whole way through!Such a unique idea. I really love how casual the voice is in this. I defiantly give you an A ...

I really love this! They way you used sensory details was like an art. The whole story is so beautifully simple which can be hard to pull off! The last ...

This is amazing! I don't even think the word 'amazing' can describe it well enough! There are a few grammar errors but aside from that it is flawless! I really ...

This was really good! It kept my interest till the very end and that's a hard feat to accomplish with me and my short attention span!There are so minor grammar ...

This is very well composed. You made it easy for the reader to feel the mood of the poem. I can relate pretty well to this; I had similar thoughts ...

This is really lovely! I love how it has both beauty and mystery together. My favorite part is the very beginning because it captured my interest right away and was ...

In my opinion the second sounds better but both are good. You probably could combine them if you wanted too. At first I read the two versions as one whole, ...