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This is a good start to build on. I really like the way the narrator's personality shows through. The concept is cool, although forbidden romance is a very commonly use ...

I really like the concept of this story. As someone who lives in the country, it's hard for me to imagine not seeing an abundance of stars in the sky ...

That was one of the best things I've read in a while. The voice in this piece is impeccable, and I really appreciate the way the character's voice is so ...

This was a really cool concept, and the ending was great. I like the way that many different characters are brought into the piece in order for the peddler to ...

Wow, just wow. That was so moving. It was hard to read about someone under so much self-inflicted mental stress. I definitely feel like there are moments in my life ...

Hi again! I'm so glad you continued this story. The improvement from the last piece to this one is incredible! Once again, captivating character kept me intrigued; this was so ...

Thank you for sharing your first story! I'm glad that you're not afraid to post writing even though there may be mistakes, after all, it's through these mistakes that everyone ...

This is so beautiful. I really like the way that the story develops from the perspective of the paper. Reading it for the first time, I was confused until I ...

This is really well written. I'd like to see more emotion in the piece, as most of the poem describes that scenario, rather than the author's opinion of it. I ...

Interesting ending. Great foreshadowing, although the ending seemed predictable to me. I would recommend adding some kind of twist to add more suspense, for example, the gun wasn't right where ...

This gave me chills. I love the way you convey the author's emotions, especially the line "Everything works like clockwork, perfect pieces moving precisely. Then there is me. The first ...