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I like this poem a lot. It has some awesome wording and some consistent flow. Keep up the good work

this is really good and it made me think, i got lost in the words and was sad when it was over keep writing you have natural talent Not to ...

I submitted it from my itouch (where I write all my stuff) so I guess it got messed up, it wasn't a huge chunk of text in the notepad

First off, the explanation at the beginning was completely unnecessary. It took away from the poetry. You shouldn't have to explain yourself for expressing yourself, it seems more like you're ...

God's been on break apparently since he was first recognized. Rather shady I think.

ahem.. Kate, I liked the criticism but you're telling me to basically write a completely different poem..

Holy crap I'm athiest with Jewish principles too! I think it was nice, but there was one rhyme that was forced, it was the one ending in gloat. I liked ...

Actually... I am an athiest. Lol

I agree with ben, but I also think some of your lines were too short, just try to keep the length consistent

I think litehawk covered most of it, but I think you should even out the stanzas a bit

I'm sorry, I'm in a bit of a stress, it was uncalled for

Funny, I was just learning the other day that as an audience member, you must put yourself in the speaker's shoes... So maybe you should try putting yourself in the ...

That's kinda ironic for you because I was jewish before I was athiest LOL. It's not a story I'm telling, if it was it would be in the narrative poetry ...

Ahem... I'm athiest...

Classy what I meant with that line I'd that I'll keep trying for something new. I doubt Socrates or Edison or any other of those figures could still think anyway, ...