-KayJuran-

i like this poem - its the sort of style that i like to read and write a lot... short and sweet! i love poems that have short lines - ...

i like the idea of the 'smell of silk'... it seems very original and isnt something you would normally see! so well done there! the content of the poem itself ...

i really enjoyed this poem! so yeah.. heres what i think... Always the bad one always wrong never right trapped in this society so close to the edge of all ...

that is so scary... whoever that was it sounds a lot like me... oh well you dont wanna know about that. :roll: anyway i love the poem... never read anything ...

i like the meaning behind this poem... i just think maybe you need to work on the rhythm a bit more... it should flow better but dont worry im sure ...

this isnt really the kind of style of poem i usually go for but that doesnt mean it isnt good! :P i dont know why but i see this in ...

ok so 1st of all did u edit the 1st post cuz if so then woolmittens' post made more sense... heres what i think... I loved you I beleived in ...

i think its gud & funnily enough i can understand it! guessin this is meant 2 b free verse cus it doesnt rhyme... i like free verse but im not ...

hey im the 1st person 2 reply 2 this! anyway i like it! its strange when u say u cant make sense of it cuz sumtimes that happens 2 me ...

i love this poem SOOOOO much!!! the thing that made me read this in the 1st place wuz the title - it cud just b any subject... Adventures in Yellow ...

dreami, evry1 has gotta luv this! just 1 suggestion i can think of offhand... But what is more rewarding, then traveling from who you are did u mean 'than' instead ...

hey i like it! sort of style i like 2 use... anyway the only criticisms i have r: line 3: How lucky - dont know why but this seems 2 ...

i LOVE this poem!!! only one thing i can think of saying which is that maybe u cud find sumthin else 2 rhyme w mansion as "mansion" & "profession" dont ...

the last line "and thats what makes me sing this song" sounds a bit weird but apart from that i really like it! i agree w Myriadne, maybe u shud ...