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Hey all,

Because it's summer and I have more time, I want to review your work! I tend to be succinct and focus on big picture, but if there's anything you want me to focus on, feel free to mention it. I'll review pretty much anything except novels at this time, unless I'm able to start from the beginning. Reviews will take 2-3 days, and I'll take a queue of up to 3 at a time. I prefer prose to poetry, and genres like drama/romance/historical fiction to sci-fi or fantasy, and there isn't any content level I'm uncomfortable with.

So get those requests in, and feel free to reach out with questions/requests!

All our dreams can come true — if we have the courage to pursue them.

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Hey! Would you mind reviewing this poem?
Why, Internet?
Thank you!
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Done! @JadeLotus

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Thanks again!
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Would you please review my new story?https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/LJF/How-To-Say-No-Prologue-145021

Warning: It's pretty dark.
“In order to...apply the teachings of the Aincrad style...keep its secret motto in mind: "stay cool.”-Reki Kawahara
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I certainly can. I'll get to this week :)

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@LJF done :)

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Hi.

I would be glad if you can review the first chapter of my novel named "Jaime".

It is 9k words long.

Here's the link to it:

Jaime (working title) chapter 1

thanks so much for considering




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@wetumbrella6

Hey there, sorry for the delay, I'm only just now seeing this. It says the work is private so I can't see it. 9K words is also a bit long so I'll happily look at it if you break it up into smaller chapters. :)

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Hi Elinor!

It’s not quite completed but I could use a second pair of eyes for its expansion. Thank you!

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Alll done @Fishr!

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Thank you! It was very helpful. Thank you again for taking time out of your day to help me out.

(Sheepish smile) May I request another review? I’m not sure if it is too long to post all in one sitting but I wasn’t sure the best way to break it up without hurting the flow. I hope it doesn’t end up being too daunting.
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The sadness drains through me rather than skating over my skin. It travels through every cell to reach the ground. I filter it yet strangely enough, I keep what was pure and it is the dirt that leaves.




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@Fishr I’m leaving on a 2 week vacation tomorrow so I won’t have the time to look at it before then, I can definitely look at it after I get back!

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Happy vacation! Thank you again!
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Hey there, Elinor! I'm Alex, a Resources/Community moderator on YWS.

This is a message just to let you know that I have locked and archived this thread due to inactivity (of more than two years). We do this to keep the forum organized and make it more likely for the writers and poets to get the feedback they seek. If you'd like to reopen this thread at any point in the future, please contact me or any other resources moderator and we'd be more than happy to reopen it for you! Thank you for volunteer service to reviewing so far, we really appreciate it.

Good day!



The strongest people are not those who show their true strength in front of us but those who win battles we know nothing about.
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