Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
140,811 Literary Works • 673,693 Reviews
I really liked this poem. It throws a nice twist on poems about death, and how you get there. Your ideas were very unique.
Anyway, all of your spelling and grammar was good. Your layout and rhyme scheme made a nice flow, etc.
Though I did notice one bump in your flow I thought I should mention. It's in stanza #2:
It's marred by footprints
Yet covered by stone
A reminder as you travel
You aren't alone
It would flow better if it was " You are not alone" rather than, "You aren't alone".
Just a suggestion.
My rating: 4.9*s
keep it up!
w&w
Not bad for someone who thinks they suck at writing and says such with a smile like yours
Hmmm...you know I ditched this genre of poetry and turned to satire..LOL...I once wrote poetry like this..no not once, but all the time. Looks like we have same thing in common when it comes to writing things like this. The mystery of the misery ends at the end of the poem. That's how i always do it...And you just did the same. I love every words of this poem, you are making me want to write dark stuff again..i hate you..lol..jk...peace!