Hey there! This is really cool, and so beautifully written! I admire the imagery and the thought that went into keeping the content of each stanza consistent with its respective theme. The whole thing gives a sense of both the longing and realization of being happy and free, and even though the end brings us back to reality, it is gentle enough to not shatter the happy mood. It really does give the feeling of your feet touching the ground once again.
The only thing I found odd sounding is the end of the third stanza, where it says, "until the ants start dismantling our skin and we shed it like we forgot we were snakes." The mental image this evokes is rather unsettling next to the beauty of the rest of the poem. Also, the likening to snakes almost gives the impression of evil lurking in the narrator's personality. My preference would be to change this section up a bit to be more appealing instead of appalling, but the poem is yours, so do what you like.
Overall, I really enjoyed and admire this work. Keep writing!
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