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What are clowns exactly?

by vampricone6783


*This is a little poem I made. I hope you like it!*

Clowns, we fear and we love them.

Clowns, we dress as them for All Hallow’s Eve.

We laugh when we see them, run when we get near them.

Scream when they’re closer, cry when they are gone.

We look at them, with gory fascination, wondering what could be going on underneath all of that exaggerated makeup…we wonder what could be below a frightening exterior.

But…what if…the clowns hid their emotions and feelings, because they were the most human of us all?

They have care so much about entertaining others, be it scaring them or making them feel better, that they have forgotten about their own emotions.

When clowns try to show their emotions, they get pushed away, so they’re encouraged to hide them more.

Clowns, such wonderful beings.

They don’t get enough credit..


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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

Clowns, we fear and we love them.

Clowns, we dress as them for All Hallow’s Eve.

We laugh when we see them, run when we get near them.

Scream when they’re closer, cry when they are gone.

We look at them, with gory fascination, wondering what could be going on underneath all of that exaggerated makeup…we wonder what could be below a frightening exterior.

But…what if…the clowns hid their emotions and feelings, because they were the most human of us all?

They have care so much about entertaining others, be it scaring them or making them feel better, that they have forgotten about their own emotions.

When clowns try to show their emotions, they get pushed away, so they’re encouraged to hide them more.

Clowns, such wonderful beings.

They don’t get enough credit..


Well here is me taking a little detour from my normal fair to take a peak at some of the other things you've written and this little poem really caught my eye because it is a genuine very interesting perspective to be looking at clowns from especially when you think about how clowns normally tend to come across in most of your stories.

I love how you manage to both showcase about how clowns can be scary sometimes and also at the same time bring about why it can be scary and how clowns in general don't exactly strive to be scary and work only towards making people laugh or at least they try to hide their emotions behind this makeup they wear and do their best to survive.

I think its a powerful message and especially towards the end where you bring in emotions so strongly and end on that powerful message there to appreciate clowns more and to see that under all of what can sometimes be so scary and appropriate more on Halloween, there's still a human, one that perhaps wants to hide from the dangers of the world more than most. All in all a really powerful piece this one.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Kate




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Heyy, Good day to you

Heh, this made me laugh. I have always been somewhat fascinated with clowns and why someone would willingly go to such length to ridicule themselves for the sake of others. Never really made sense you know?

"Clowns, we fear and we love them.

Clowns, we dress as them for All Hallow’s Eve.

We laugh when we see them, run when we get near them."

As someone who loves the Joker and DC, this really resonates. I love the character but would most definitely not be in a Fictional Universes vicinity of the guy.

"We look at them, with gory fascination, wondering what could be going on underneath all of that exaggerated makeup…we wonder what could be below a frightening exterior."

This fascination of clowns has given rise to one of the best horror tropes; murder clowns. Be it IT's Pennywise or Sweet Tooth. The childhood trauma from someone who could chased by a clown really sticks huh?

"They have care so much about entertaining others, be it scaring them or making them feel better, that they have forgotten about their own emotions."

This reminds me of one of my favourite Goosebumps stories, a relatively recent one about clowns and a boy who wanted to be one. It wasnt scary per se, but what it was was entertaining, I used to read it almost every other night before going to bed.

"When clowns try to show their emotions, they get pushed away, so they’re encouraged to hide them more."

I'm not going to say I relate to this, But damn. Entertainers or generally cheerful people, they moment they stop being the source of positivity, people lose interest in them.

Thanks of reading and have a nice day!




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I am so sorry, I do not know why that sent twice, you have my apologies



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This is an interesting poem, it tells a story about clowns who hide they're emotions in order to entertain children, they never get asked how they're feeling or doing since they're too busy making other people happy and it could hurt them when people are scared of them, all they try to do is make people laugh while making themselves suffer and not worrying about themselves.




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Hey Vampricone,

Very interesting observations on clowns - it almost seemed like an article format rather than a poem with its philosophical questions regarding clowns which made me think of them in new ways.

A few thoughts:

On formatting - we've discussed this before but two things to polish up punctuation a little:

1) when you use an "ellipses" (...) traditionally a person just uses three (3) dots. Not four, not two. This will make your work look more polished.

2) After any type of punctuation, be sure to include a space (ie. after a comma,[space] leave a space, and after a period.[space] leave a space, and after an ellipses...[space] leave a space) doing this will make your work more polished, and easier to read.

I think an area you could dig into even more is what sort of emotions the clowns are hiding - and also maybe you could add in a little bit of imagery about the clown's makeup to really set the scene and paint a picture for the reader at the beginning. Describing the red nose, and rounded lips, and white-painted faces, I think would create an image that the reader could attach the rest of the content to.

This part I thought was the most intriquing:

When clowns try to show their emotions, they get pushed away,so they’re encouraged to hide them more.


I had never thought of clowns in this way. Very interesting!

Hope some of this helped! Keep on writing!

alliyah




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i agree with this poem. behind the makeup, clowns are humans. they have emotions. they aren’t just scary clowns. some may be murderous, but others are kind. we never know how they are feeling, or how they truly are.
this poem was a great demonstration of what’s hiding behind the clown makeup. i like how short it is. good job!




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I enjoyed the versatility of this poem. It was very double-sided, though it felt quite undecided near the beginning. But the ending was much more definite and so: easier to grasp. There isn't really a rhythm or rhyme scheme in the poem and I feel like some lines are fascinating ideas which should rather be their own verses. Maybe you should start the poem with one perception of clowns rather than both combined at once. I agree clowns don't get enough credit for doing such a ridiculous job and they most definitely might be wonderful human beings.




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Hello vampricone6783!!

I enjoyed the emotions i got from this poem. It seemed to be going one way then transitioned to another very smoothly which i really liked. The topic you've chosen is very creative and wordly. Something everyone can understand.

I loved how you touched on thier emotions and how their just drenched in these makeup loaded expressions but thats not what their feeling.

I really enjoyed "But...what if...the clowns hid their emotions and feelings, becuase they were the most human of us all?" very clever to turn that into a questions, becuase it honestly got me thinking. I love poems that make me think :)

I enjoyed the ryhme aspect of it as it added to the flow, but how you didn't just stick to the rythem of the ryhme the entire time.

All and all a creative poem that makes you think, easy to read and added an interesting outlook.




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Hello, @vampirecone6783. This is a pretty nice poem. When I was younger, I get scared with clowns, maybe it's because I used to watch horror trailers with clowns and get nightmares about them. But when I got a little older, I thought clowns can be good people if they don't actually mean to scare you off but, clowns can be kind too and show love to people and make them laugh. I love how you expressed how clowns should be treated nicely and as a being in this world. It's just sad though when people make fun of clowns and these clowns want to hide their emotions more. Keep it up, I love your stories! And stay safe and cozy! Merry Christmas!





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