*This is a song I made about a character named Soleil Le Claire, from the animated Dreamworks show “Fright Krewe” on Hulu. The second season is coming out on March 29th of this year. In honor of this, I made this song. This song is underneath my folder titled “Some scary-ish stories”. Gacha Club character designs are on my wall. Enjoy this song! Please watch the show, it’s amazing! :>*
I always dreamed of going on an adventure
The final girl to live through it all
I’d brave through all the goblins and ghouls
I’d take their teeth and turn it into jewelry
Because I’m a freak too
And they can’t hurt me
All my life, they judge me
I’m like a Halloween decoration
A timed jumpscare
A thing of nightmares
And I smiled through it all
I laughed at their disgust
“People will hate what they don’t understand, so don’t ever lose your shine” my parents would tell me
So I didn’t
I kept through it all
I waved my freak flag high in the sky
I wore my non-conformity like a badge
I carried the insults like trophies
“Because their hate means nothing when you still stand”
Or so my parents would say
When it was all starting to go wrong
I kept my grin on
The demon wouldn’t give up
So I wouldn’t either
When it said it was going to take everything I’d love away
I told it to crawl back to the hole it came from
I thought that I won
But it showed me terror
It showed me pain
My heart, it aches from the vision
Everything and everyone I ever loved
Gone
Bleeding
Burning
And it was all my fault
I’m the one who made the demon come out
I’m the one who put them all in danger
It was all my fault
It told me to keep quiet
To do as it said
So I listened
I thought that my silence would fix it all
I talk too much
I act without thinking
I put them all in trouble
They came to save me
They came because they love me
They helped me get rid of it
They took me away
“It’s over, Soleil
No need to worry yourself dead
It’s okay
We’re here now”
Or so my parents think
Because the truth is
It’s still there
It’s hiding in the shadows
It wants me to do terrible things
Such awful, ugly things
Parents think they can protect you
They think they can tell you that you’re worth it and you’ll be fine
But I’m not worth the mud on my boots
Or the dirt in a grave
I’m no final girl
I’m just a kid
And it’s all my fault
I’m sorry
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“They” said for the first time is talking about literal monsters.
“They” for the second time is people judging Soleil.
“They” as in the people in trouble are Soleil’s loved ones.
“They” who came to help are Soleil’s parents.
“Final girl” is a reference to the final girl trope in horror movies. In this song, Soleil at first thought that being a “final girl” would be cool, but after all that happened, it’s not. What happened to Soleil ultimately made her a sort of “final girl”.
It’d make more sense if you watch the show.
Good morning, dear friend!!
I love how you describe her as 'the final girl to live through it all'. That sentence just feels so poetic to me, in my opinion. The alliteration of 'goblins and ghouls' flows off of the tongue really well. This verse read well and It gives a spooky feeling. The details of wanting to turn their teeth into jewelry was good. I like the simple phrases that overall give a spooky feeling combined.
I love that sentence that you quite from her parents. That freak flag high statement reminds me of that song from Shrek, haha. But I think this song contains some of that message. Showing who you really are and not hiding it on the inside, despite which ever species or monster you are. I like the enduring words you use like 'kept through it all'. Awesome!
And I liked how you phrased this part:
Then word on each line is a great formatting. It almost represents this blood that is just pouring down like a stream, watching everyone that you loved. And these lines lead into this ending:
Overall, you had great descriptions in every single line, which combined to give a great horror line, but also sad/encouraging feeling. I love the progression of emotions that we see throughout the piece. Great work! And keep writing!!
Your friend,
Ellie
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thought i'd take a look at this i'm not the best at giving advice on poetry but i'll try if i can!
now i don't know much about this show so I'm going to just go with what you've written hope that's okay.
Oo goblin jewelry that would be interesting to see on someone you'd have to use something to real clean it up though or it might smell like something rotten.
this started with a lot of hurt visible in the narrators words and it really got me drawn to it so that I carried on readying.
the twist when it went form rising against all odds to feeling like a failure was just done so well to, poetry isn't a thing I read often but I'm glad to be ready yours.
the one line though that i feel could possible be change is I'm no final girl
i looked up a little about this movie but really only a little and i'm thinking that a line like I'm no last girl survivor.
I feel like saying the title takes away from its meaning a little
but best poem i've read in awhile by far see ya