*This song/poem is underneath my folder titled “The cake curse”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs <33”. Enjoy!*
There was a creature
Her name was Eerie
Eerie was a spider
Eerie was a bat
Eerie was a young girl in a witch’s hat
She was whatever anyone imagined her to be
Though she appeared young as a human
She was older than the world around her
A sweet little thing who wanted to spread joyous mischief
Eerie brought out the Treats with the candies
But she also brought out the Tricks with a curse
Down in the depths of online, she realized that she could do something special
So she set a little trick for the right person to find
A cake recipe of loved ones’ hair and blood
To make whoever ate the cake a monster!
More monsters, more fun
Treats and Tricks
For little miss Eerie
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This poem is really cute, and matches with the spooky season of October really well. I really like how you incorporated a rhyme with the lines "Eerie was a spider, Eerie was a bat, Eerie was a young girl in a witch's hat." It adds some fun and excitement to the character. Though I wished it may have rhymed a bit more to continue the flow, it was really well done.
Thank you very much. ^v^
Hello vampricone6783!
This was a cute poem for the little shape-shifting witch, Eerie. I liked the lines,
"Eerie brought out the Treats with the candies
But she also brought out the Tricks with a curse",
its a nice play on the trick-or-treat phrase and it gives indication of what shes capable of (and what kind of witch she is).
I liked how it rhymed at the start yet it drops the scheme immediately after, it'd be cool if the whole thing rhymed.
Well done!
I%u2019m glad you enjoyed this!