I don’t understand pain
I don’t know about God
I can’t talk about my imagination
Something I don't see is making me too shy
But none of these things matter
Cause if you can’t see it with your eyes
Then it probably doesn't exist
But if all of that were true then
What’s with all these books about love
Why do I envision worlds superior to this
If an easy cure exists
Please cure me from my mind
If things you can’t see, really do exist
Lord there’s gotta be more to the boring life than this
Please cure me from my mind
Empty all my thoughts
Prove all the illusions
Show me they aren't delusions
Tell me sight is meant to be
The difference between the air we breathe and blood
Just cure me from my mind
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I love the sound of seeking in this song. Prove all the illusions... What a sweetly profound line, the understatement, but the poetic simplicity, the way you say it gives more to it than even makes much sense: I understand it almost without cognitively processing it. I understand it even before (and without) reading the following line.
What does the difference between the air we breathe and blood, what do you mean? I find no way to get inside this thought without you elaborating a little bit more.
Haha, funny thought, even if you can't see it with your eyes, what the heck is a mind's eye for? Excellent line there you have about, "Why do I envision worlds superior to this?" I'm burning to tell you, if you want your own thoughts emptied, fill it with other philosophers bygone and stuff, and consider and weigh if you see any things that make sense to you. Keep the philosophers that make the most sense: and there you may trace the outlines of a pattern.
I love the Immense Simplicity of this, and I can only imagine what kind of tune this would work well to, or what you had envisioned in your mind!! 94/100 for this baby!! Keep jamming, and I have something to give you...
HEELLO Tiger Aye,
Lyrics of being an enemy to yourself. At first I couldn't really see this in the first stanza. It only appears toward the end of the song. "Something I don't see is making me too shy". I suppose this part is where you want to cure yourself. Despise yourself for being shy to the world. You want to find this thing you can't see and cure it from your mind.
The second stanza however doesn't seem relevant. I may be totally wrong and that stanza may end up being the most important part of the entire song but it's just my opinion. I'm a crappy reviewer, sorry.
"If things you can't see, really do exist". Well, you can't see everything. That would be a pain. Humans naturally want to know everything due to their born-with curiosity. Sometimes this curiosity grows into something serious and I just want to get rid of it.
"Prove all the illusions". When you aren't trusting your eyes or your mind. You want to know the answer. You have to know the answer. It's just a must that never gets resolved.
Clear Your Mind,
Night Kaizer
I loved this. I think you captured perfectly how someone trapped inside their own mind feels. I love how you start with what you don't know, how someone/something in your mind is making you shy. I like your self expression, you seem to have found your voice and it's showing beautifully. I loved this poem. It was enjoyable to read and I hope to read more from you in the future.
I loved this. I think you captured perfectly how someone trapped inside their own mind feels. I love how you start with what you don't know, how someone/something in your mind is making you shy. I like your self expression, you seem to have found your voice and it's showing beautifully. I loved this poem. It was enjoyable to read and I hope to read more from you in the future.
I loved this. I think you captured perfectly how someone trapped inside their own mind feels. I love how you start with what you don't know, how someone/something in your mind is making you shy. I like your self expression, you seem to have found your voice and it's showing beautifully. I loved this poem. It was enjoyable to read and I hope to read more from you in the future.
Wow! I like this piece a lot with its constant questioning tone.
I'm not too sure what this was supposed to mean, though. Did you mean paranoid? Why (or what) would the speaker or whoever be shy?
To me, this seemed out of place. There were all the questions of existence and purpose, and out nowhere there's a mention of love.
Either way, I enjoyed reading this. Nice!
Oh, the speaker's shyness was in reference to them not being able to share their imagination in others. The mention of love was because the speaker is saying "Hey there, people say things you can't see don't exist, but then there are a million books about their about love, even though it's also something you can't see". thank you for reviewing!