Piano Song: BPM 80
The flowers you have are neat,
And I would love to take some with me!
It's not fair,
You live life so easily.
But I'll still grow these seeds.
They're dead now and I don't know why. :')
Cafe dates don't last long,
and that's okay.
I can buy my own Mocha Tea.
This is a silly little song I made. It's not meant to rhyme, the intention was not that. It's just meant to be silly and sweet. I have the score for those who want to play it, but if you're gonna share it anywhere, please credit me!
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https://flat.io/score/67549598599755e6b ... -mocha-tea
hello taost! i'm herb, here to review your wonderful lyrics
there's this sense of disappearance, the fleeting-ness of cafe dates, and flowers, is something i find interesting! i almost wish i could hear the piano accompaniment to these lyrics, just to understand the thematics of it.
i like the sweetness of the short, almost pining, of it all, but i almost wish i had more! what about these flowers are special? have you always struggled growing flowers? why mocha tea?
^^^ on the note of mocha tea, i love that! i've never thought as mocha as a tea, although i am like 75% certain mocha is chocolate??? for the person who calls himself things like "teatiime" you'd think i'd know more about these kinds of things xD
i loved this short and sweet song, but again, i think if you were to revise, add more! tell me more about your love, the flowers, the mocha tea. i want to know so badly your history with mocha tea! and PLEASE tag me if you do!
best & sincerely,
herb
I do plan on adding more, if you want the link to the score, I can pm it to you. It's a little funky honestly, it was written to be weird. The mocha tea was a reference to Mocha Bubble Tea, I just didn't have the space to add the "bubble" in there lol. I'm so glad you like this.
There was no definite reason on why I created this piece other than for laughs and giggles. Though someone did comment with a really interesting definition that I liked. They said something about the seeds resembling love and friendships that never grew. I liked that.
Thank you for reading! I'll be sure to be writing more!
~Taost<3
Hello there! Well, you mentioned how you wanted this to be silly & sweet and I think you did exactly that
I love how simple this is! Oooh, I would love to see the score as well!
Let me comment on the actual content of the poem, since I haven't heard the actual song yet. To me, this seems to comment on almost this feeling of wanting something but accepting that it won't happen. You talk about how café dates don't last long, and then you sort of have the acceptance of that. The last statement:
This seems to be saying that you can do things for yourself. I can tell how you were trying to make this sweet and short and funny. You talk about seeds that don't grow and that are dead. To me, this seems pretty accurate when it comes to meeting people and trying to make friends and dating. Most things don't work out. You use pretty straightforward sentences here which make it easy for me to understand what is happening.
The beginning part seems almost like a desire for someone to give you flowers, but no one ever has. So you were making these obvious statements like "oh I wish I could get some flowers" but no one ever does. This is a pretty short song, and, like I said, it was pretty simple, but I really liked the tone of it, and how you can capture this relatable feeling in such a short thing. Overall, I look forward to reading more of what you post here! Have a great day.
Your friend,
Ellie
I'm going to be honest, you understood this song a whole lot more than I did while making it. And now that I think about it, you hit pretty spot on than I did. Thank you for writing this!
~Taost<3