The Puppeteer

by sarahjane97

Published May 17, 2011

In Poetry

I am Fear.
I’m the mastermind
behind the nightmares.
I’m the reason
society will fall.
I’m the driving force
of human conflict,
and the foothold
of a dictator.

I pull on your strings
and bestow my will,
make you shiver
and scream at nothing.
Your “choices”,
your “decisions”,
are only delusions
of self control.

You can block me out.
You can cover me up.
You can say I’m not here.
You can be ignorant.
For no matter what you do,
puppet,
I will never leave.

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Matthews
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Matthews commented Comment · Jun 28, 2011

Awesome job! I really enjoyed this. Sorry I don't have anything productive to comment on!

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michaeld
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michaeld commented Comment · Jun 27, 2011

I got the chills... Bravo once more!!!!! :)

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IKnowAll
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IKnowAll commented Comment · May 19, 2011

Fabulously creepy! I always like this kind of poetry! Perfect for little kids. MUAHAHAHAHA! Seriously though, good job. Pat yourself on the back, and have a good day.

-IKnowAll

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michaeld
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michaeld commented Comment · May 18, 2011

this was so beautifully written that I have nothing whatsoever to critique!! I am extremely jealous of your poetry skills and have been since our 6 grade English class together but that's not the point. BRAVO!!!!

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Masquerade
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Masquerade wrote a review Review · May 18, 2011

This is a beautifully written poem. It flowed nicely, and I enjoyed reading it. I don't have a lot of criticism, so here's my commentary.

I am Fear. I like how fear is capitalized.
I’m the mastermind
behind the nightmares.
I’m the reason
society will fall.
I’m the driving force
of human conflict,
and the foothold
of a dictator.
I love how this stanza flows with the sentence structure.

I pull on your strings
and bestow my will; There's something funny about this line. Perhaps "bestow" isn't the best word to be used here. I would experiment with other words. Also, the semi colon should be just a comma.
make you shiver A comma could go here, grammatically speaking, but it kind of depends on how you want the poem to flow.
and scream at nothing.
Your “choices”,
your “decisions”,
are only delusions
of self control. I like these last few lines, very creepy, and the use of quotation marks.

You can block me out.
You can cover me up.
You can say I’m not here.
You can be ignorant.
For no matter what you do,
puppet, I love how puppet is italicized and in its own line. Very effective.
I will never leave. A good, blunt, ending. Nicely tied off.


Well done!
Masquerade

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Soulkana
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Soulkana wrote a review Review · May 17, 2011

Wow I really liked this. Loved all of it. Honestly I don't have anything to critique.. Am not good with grammar so I can't fix that much so I say nicely well written. I particularly like how you described the choices and the trying to block it out. It shows how people truly try to block things out and how they try to believe their choices weren't because of fear. Nicely well done and I loved it. Really can't find anything really wrong with this so sorry I have no help with that. Keep up the good job and Happy Writing. Hope to see more soon and Buenas Suerte. Sayonara!
Soulkana<3



I say Wolf, for all wolves are not of the same sort; there is one kind with an amenable disposition – neither noisy, nor hateful, nor angry, but tame, obliging and gentle, following the young maids in the streets, even into their homes. Alas! Who does not know that these gentle wolves are of all such creatures the most dangerous!
— Charles Perrault