All About Me

You seem to have a problem with commas and run on sentences, mainly in the first paragraph. You are listing a bunch of things at once but you are capitalizing each time which isn't proper grammar. Here's a quick fix:

I am an ordinary person, there is nothing special about me, I don't have any special talent, I was never born with a spoon, not to talk of a 'silver spoon', My father never traveled out till his death, He was a business who retired after 55years of diligent service, He never enjoyed his life, my mother was and still a petty trader till date. I hawked okra, pepper, kerosene, garri, yam, tomatoes, vegetable, maize, bread at different stages of my life. I have failed several times and disappointed a lot of people, I dropped out of school more than once. There is nothing unique about me.

I am an ordinary person. There is nothing special about me; I have no special talents and I was not born with a silver spoon in my mouth. My father was a businessman that retired after fifty five years of diligent service. He was the one that never seemed to enjoy his life. My mother was and still is a petty trader till date. I hawked okra, pepper, kerosene, garri yam, maize, among other crops at different stages of my life. It is true that I have failed several times and have dissapointed a lot of people. I dropped out of school more than once. Truth be told,there is nothing unique about me.

celebrate me.
Capitalize this.

Anyway, that's all I could find on this. Hope I helped!

Hello there! This looks like an interesting and fun story, and I'm here today to review it!

First and foremost, I was rather surprised by the nature of your story. When I started reading it, I expected it to be a typical tale of pursuing your dreams and what that can accomplish, as well as a standard lesson on success and accomplishing it. And, in a sense, that's kind of what I've been given, since that is the core purpose of the work, and you highlight the importance of believing in yourself and surrounding yourself with intelligent people. Yet, on the other hand, you managed to do it in a wholly personal, unique way. You do a fascinating job of covering the life of your parents, of your own personal struggles, and the networks of people that you've created. It's an admirable story, particularly given your lack of success early in life, and beautifully communicated, which drives in your point and makes it stick in the reader's mind. That, of course, is a good quality to have.

There's something, too, that's poignant about your message. You don't try to define yourself as a special, or unique person. However, that doesn't detract from your overall message - if anything, it adds upon it. You don't try to pander or emphasize the fairly common message of how each person is special; you describe your own life, how it started ordinary, and what you did to get you to where you are now. In that respect, you do an amazing job of keeping people away from the superficialities of which they commonly hear, and provide them a meaningful story with a well-communicated point about making friends, being happy, and establishing a network, which all comes down to working to accomplish your dreams. So, I must commend you for that.

That's about it. Your story is concise and well-written, and I'm impressed. The messages are meaningful and bright, and my only complaint would have to be your usage of grammar and spelling. You tend to use a large number of commas, especially in your first paragraph, which makes your sentences a little long and choppy. Yes, they do accomplish the purpose of commas in the sense that they provide a pause, but it comes across as a little sloppy if you overuse them. So I'd suggesting some variation, like breaking apart longer sentences with periods, semicolons (which can tie together two ideas in a similar manner to a comma and a conjunction, but is used in place of both), and so forth. This part of the site generally has a lot of advice on grammar and punctuation - more than I can provide, at least: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewforum.php?f=151.

Anyways, nicely done! This is a wonderful story!

I'm always open for stories of people who've found success and happiness, so I already approve of this one. Am I correct to assume that this is your life's story?
I hope so, because it's a heartwarming read - no huge tragedy involved, just someone taking one step at a time and slowly making it in the world.

There are some grammatical missteps in this text, mind. Judging by your username, am I correct to assume that English isn't your first language? I've a few suggestions that could help with it, if you'd like.
For instance, make sure you don't mistake commas for periods. Furthermore, keep an eye out to make sure spelling and word tenses are the correct ones; and if you want to write numbers, the norm is that you write them out. Finally, and this is more of a structural thing, but I think it'd be good if you made use of paragraphs to break the sentences apart. It makes it easier to read.

As an example, let's look at the first bits of your story:

I am an ordinary person, there is nothing special about me, I don't have any special talent, I was never born with a spoon, not to talk of a 'silver spoon', My father never traveled out till his death, He was a business who retired after 55years of diligent service, He never enjoyed his life, my mother was and still a petty trader till date. I hawked okra, pepper, kerosene, garri, yam, tomatoes, vegetable, maize, bread at different stages of my life.