Hi mel,It's been a little bit since I last reviewed poetry, so I apologize in advance if this review is a little rough. But this poem really resonated with me, so I wanted to try my hand at reviewing.The first thing that stuck out at me was how there was almost a rhyming scheme to the very first stanza. They're not true rhymes, but they added momentum to your poem. It was part of what kept me reading it. I also love how you tied together the images of the flowers and the moon on the side of the poem with its actual contents; the imagery of only having thorns left really stands out. Another piece of imagery that I really love is this part:
i don't want to contract the rot that the tree who grew you passed on
i want to be soft and i want to not be so cruel
Love this! Seriously, awesome work!
Hi there, mordax here for a review!So to start off, I loved this poem. The title already hooked me in and that first stanza... omg, absolutely amazing. I am being completely honest when I tell you my brows rose and I was like "okayyyy ". I am particularly attached to the line "the sun and time will make sure to leave me calcified". It flows so well and I am so jealous of your poetic talent!!I have very few critiques, but here they are:The line:
i don't want to be a rose, and i have never really been one
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