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Garbage Chute

by mb1221


“I don’t want this baby!”,

I heard her cry.

The cool air outside the worm womb

electrocuted me

blending with her motherly sobs.

.

Sorry, she said

Then embraced me tight

as her salty tears burned my cheeks

.

I sensed movement

Slow, steady paces

A metal clicked,

and I was free

.

Life is a freefall

A hasty drop that hits me

from all four sides.

It’s dark…

It’s cold…

A little humid

like a drying wound.

.

At the end of the fall,

there’s light.

My eyes pop open

A dead goldfish,

A brown banana peel,

A smashed drink bottle,

And a pair of old socks.

As I ask myself,

“Do I belong here?”,

the world stinks,

and I cry. 


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Mon May 13, 2019 12:40 pm
GigiNicole17 wrote a review...



Hi, mb1221!!!

I'm Gigi, here with your first review.

First off, great job!!! Remember in the dialogue to use quotation marks, which you did for the most part, there were just a few places where you didn't. I like the imagery and the personification you used when comparing the Garbage Chute to the pregnancy. I thought that was an interesting take. I like that you showed the speaker's insecurities, making it real and raw emotion. Great job on that. Overall I think you did extremely well.

Keep Writing! <3

~Gigi, The Jesus Freak :D





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