I love the concept of this. You break the fourth wall by addressing the audience very effectively. It's an inspiring message. I also enjoyed the fact that I went through all of the emotions with you. My one criteria for you is that your rhyme scheme could use some further development. I was a little confused by the fact that sometimes it rhymed predictably, and sometimes it didn't. My advice would be to choose one or the other--either every line needs a rhyme, or none of them do. I'm so glad you found solace in writing! It's a great way to express yourself to others. Good luck on your future works!
Points: 205
Reviews: 13
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