Everything has to be perfect.
Every paragraph, every line, every word.
Everything has to be exquisite.
To have it otherwise would be simply absurd!
So what if it's hastily written?
Every writer writes flawless, no need for revision.
A first draft you say, what is that?
There's no such thing- Stick to writer tradition!
Everything has to be perfect.
Your story must flow onto the page!
Everything has to be perfect.
And, oh dear...
What was I saying?
Hold on, just let me start over.
Take two, take three, take four...
Turn off the camera, stop rolling!
Goodness, where is my editor?
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This is great! I loved this. This poem IS PERFECT! (Well, that's a slight exaggeration, but it is awesome!) The only thing that I think could be played with is, "Every Writer writes flawless" I had to read it twice, it might have flowed better if it was flawlessly, rather than flawless.
Besides that minor detail, it flowed very nicely, and the word choice was great! I cannot wait to see more from you!
Thank you for the review, I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Haha, I love this!
I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Hello, Shikora here.
Can I just start out bay saying, wow! This was a really good poem. Everything just flowed together really well. Every word meant something in this work of yours.
Your punctuation was really good, the way you did it kind of gave the poem a dramatic feeling.
This poem is also really true in a way, and that's what made it fun to read and it gave me a few good laughs.
But there was one thing I did see was that you said perfect three times in the poem, now I'm not saying you have to change it, because it is the name of the poem, but maybe you could change one of them to to flawless.
Like your third line in the poem.
But this poem was really fun to read and review. I hope to see more of you work on YWS soon. Never stop writing and have a great day/night.
Your friend
Shikora.
Thank you so much for the review! I was wondering if I should change some of the perfects, so I'll see if it sounds better if I do
Okay, glad I could help. Your writing is really good.