He says everything and nothing
Trying so hard to explain how he feels
All the joy that you bring
But there aren’t words for that
In any language, alive or dead
So I watch you and I watch him
And I understand the meaning when
He watches you dance
And leans in to memorize your motion
And when you soften in his arms
Needing nothing else to protect you from the cold
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This was a really compelling read. I have to say my favorite lines would be "He watches you dance, And leans in to memorize your motion". A lovely and heartbreaking statement. This piece got better the more I read. I love this idea of jealousy and learning while watching this couple who are oblivious to any sort of attention given to them by the author. There are honestly few words to describe joy and love, yet humans try so hard to accomplish just that. One of the only ways to learn something so delicate is to witness it in action. This is honestly one of the best poems I've read all day.
Hey there hopeless here to give you, yeah you, a review!
Ok so let's jump on in, I would like to start off by saying that I really like this poem! Great job! But there are a few things I would like to say about it. First off grammar and spelling are fine. But the punctuation, I know not all poems need it though to me it looks nicer. And maybe you could break it up into stanzas and not all one big thing. But the poem it's self is great and I love the little story it told, amazing job on this. Bravo to the whole thing. Well that is all I had to say about it, maybe fix those things. Do what you want though it's not my poem it's yours.
Keep writing and stay beautiful!!
~hopeless
Hey there hopeless here to give you, yeah you, a review!
Ok so let's jump on in, I would like to start off by saying that I really like this poem! Great job! But there are a few things I would like to say about it. First off grammar and spelling are fine. But the punctuation, I know not all poems need it though to me it looks nicer. And maybe you could break it up into stanzas and not all one big thing. But the poem it's self is great and I love the little story it told, amazing job on this. Bravo to the whole thing. Well that is all I had to say about it, maybe fix those things. Do what you want though it's not my poem it's yours.
Keep writing and stay beautiful!!
~hopeless
Very nice, i love it..... it is good to experience love from afar but the feelings is totally different when you experience it yourself. Very good writing and keep writing these wonderful poems.
I love love love it!!!! this is a fantastic piece. very good young writer. I honestly feel many people will be able to relate to this piece. I often watch love from a far. It's nice to experience love itself. Seeing too people fond of each other is interesting as well. I like how you made us feel as if we are watching them closely. To me when I think of love and well endless love I think of Bella and Edward from Twilight. (If you havent heard of it) Anways, I like your work.it was very creative. Keep up the writing!!(: