Dance

Hi, Lives her for a review.
I don't dance, I am actually usually do everything in my power not to dance.
But I love theatre and music, so I understand the emotion the poem is communicating.
When I act or play it is so much more than saying my lines or playing the correct notes, it is like you are the person your portraying or the composer of the song.
You portrayed this very well and I hope to see more.

Hey! I want to start by saying that I too am a dancer. I like your poem! As a dancer, I find it very relatable. It definitely conveys the truth about dance. I specifically like the line, "I watch the world disappear." The word choice there is excellent. I also like the line, "I let go. I smile." It's almost showing opposite things. Letting go isn't typically associated with being happy, so it's interesting to see those two phrases together.

Like the other reviewers, my only critique is that it's a very literal poem. It lacks some of the imagery that makes poems unique and thought provoking. It's straight forward and too the point, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but it's also not a great thing. I had perhaps suggest something that would allow the reader to interpret the poem in their own way.

Very nice work, I really enjoyed this poem. Keep witting, you're very skilled.

-Riles

Hey! I want to start by saying that I too am a dancer. I like your poem! As a dancer, I find it very relatable. It definitely conveys the truth about dance. I specifically like the line, "I watch the world disappear." The word choice there is excellent. I also like the line, "I let go. I smile." It's almost showing opposite things. Letting go isn't typically associated with being happy, so it's interesting to see those two phrases together.

Like the other reviewers, my only critique is that it's a very literal poem. It lacks some of the imagery that makes poems unique and thought provoking. It's straight forward and too the point, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but it's also not a great thing. I had perhaps suggest something that would allow the reader to interpret the poem in their own way.

Very nice work, I really enjoyed this poem. Keep witting, you're very skilled.

-Riles

Hello there, hmcg, and Happy #RevMo !

Now, you get straight to the point here.
This poem is short and concise, and I read it in about thirty seconds, without having to stop and ponder over each line. You laid it all out, right on the table for us. Simple as that. Don't get me wrong. I like how succinct this is. But at the same time... I don't. There's no imagery or emotions - you're basically just telling us what "I" does. I'm interpreting this poem as you saying dancing means more to you than dancing. You're doing so much more: releasing feelings, tearing down walls, losing the pain. But I don't think you brought your message across maybe the way you wanted to. It has the potential to be very powerful; however, you're doing a lot of telling, and not showing. I want to know how you lead with your heart, and tear down walls, not simply you telling me you do those things.

On another note, the "I"s beginning each line became tiring. I'm wondering why you put that "No" at the beginning of the second-to-last line there. It broke your pattern, and seems sort of unnecessary.
But really, my biggest critique is how bland this came across as. Your idea here is fabulous, and I will admit: I've never read a poem on dancing or ballerinas before. So, this was cool.

If I came across as harsh or frightfully rude, I'm so sorry!
I hope you keep up your writing, and I wish you a fantastic day.

cheers for now!
~rosette

Hey there! Shey here for a review!

Overall, nice piece. It was well written, and while short, it wasn't too brief. You were able to clearly deliver the message you wanted to portray, and that's something a lot of poets can't seem to do nowadays.

My biggest complaint is that you stuck with a repetition for most of the poem, each line starting with "I". However, the second line from the end, you added the "No" to it, and I felt that that killed it. The no isn't really necessary (and actually makes the statement a double negative!), and so I recommend you ditch it completely. BUT my suggestions are not absolute, so you may want to see what other reviewers think before you make the change.

Some formatting would be nice. It gives the poem an aspect that comes across as more skilled, like you as a poet really know what you're doing. I'm aware that the goshdarned publishing center destroys formatting, and it's very likely you pasted this in with stanzas splitting up the piece. Here's a trick to keep the formatting there.

First, select the "</>", after selecting the center. It should be in the top left of the display. Then put a "<p>" before each stanza, and a "</p>" after each one. Lastly, put "</br>" after each line, and you should have a beautifully formatted poem!

Overall, great job! Keep up the great work, cause I look forward to seeing more from you!

Hi hmcg! I'm here for a quick review

Since I do ballet, I totally understand not "just dancing". For such a short poem, this piece expresses so much more behind the cover! But... I'm not quite sure what you mean when you said "lead with my heart". Are you trying to say you dance with you heart?

Also, "stop feeling sad" feels so much less powerful after most of the other lines. Maybe something along the lines of "I forget my despair"? Just a suggestion, but I think you need a more powerful word there. A couple other line could use more powerful synonyms to enhance the poem, but that is just my opinion; I'm still just a newbie writer myself.

Anyways, great poem! Keep writing!