Hi there @fukase I am here to do a review on your poem here, First thing grate length.
what I like most
you really do have some grate lines in this poem like.
I really feel like there is a lot of description in this line unlike some of the others, you have done some grate work in this poem, but then again there are things that need to be ficksed, I must say that @Shikora pointed out a lot of things in the review that she did.the main girl character name is Hayati,
So there is not to much that she did not point out that i have to review, So good on shikora her reviews are the best.
What needs work
okay not really getting this first part of why its in here but anyways.in Padang, Indonesia, watching a movie
this to the line before is not really making much sens to me, I feel like its note really being thought threw very well but, its just that I am not really following a long with what your say in this poem. but really as I said shikora has told you most of what you need to ficks, just to say capitol Letters or not in sentences.quiet in the corner, my face a little happier.
So that is all that I can say, if I came as being really harsh and unfair I am really sorry can you pleas for give me, So keep up the grate work here.
@EagleFly out to seek and kill
Happy review day
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