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All Things Pure and Good

The hero and villain are separated by twenty feet of ash-dusted soil, littered with the cracked remains of a concrete sidewalk. Around them, the air is clouded, the clouds yellow. The screams have long since faded into bone-chilling silence, and their breaths carry over the roaring wind, echoing in their ears.

“You have already taken away everything they have.”

“It’s not enough.”

“What more could you want?” The hero stands open-mouthed, gaping with teary eyes at the man who razed an entire city and all of its inhabitants to the ground and dared to say it wasn’t enough. So nonchalantly, as if he was merely checking off a list of goals to accomplish, as if he had all the time in the world to take the hero apart piece by piece.

The hero had lived in the city. His family’s bones were probably buried somewhere in the ruins behind him.

“I want you to bow to me. I want New York’s golden boy, the hero of all heroes, to beg for his life, and then I want to kill him.”

The villain’s gloved hands are trembling from where they are shoved in his pockets. The thought of crying quickly crosses his mind, but he hasn’t tasted the salt of his own tears since he was accused of running a knife through his father’s stomach years ago. He’s battled to keep it that way since.

It was always meant to end with the hero. It would be the final step to feeling whole.

“I just wanted to make it right--”

“Oh, you were such a piece of good in this world,” the villain murmured, clenching his hands into fists. “And you told me with your bright little eyes that I could be good again, and you believed it too. Am I to blame for that?”

“B-but--”

“I suppose you weren’t entirely wrong. There was good in me for a while. But I was tired of feeling so… undecided.”

The hero lets him go on, clearly trying to gather strength. It’s no use. He’s hardly keeping himself upright; blood is streaked across his face like warpaint, and his eyes glaze over with pain every time he puts weight on his right leg.

“Every day I would wake up split between these glowing parts of me that were still good and the pieces of darkness that everyone saw. Every day I did something bad, I would think, another one of those shining parts of me is gone and I would ache at the thought of being just another a fallen angel. Just another fuckup destroying his own life.”

It’s admirable, really, how the hero is still trying to ward off the pain. He’s digging his fingernails into his palms, gritting his teeth. He must know he has no chance of survival. He must be selfish enough to beg for his own life, even knowing that the villain won’t let him go anyway. All things pure and good must be ruined.

“Wouldn’t it make you sick, to constantly be reminded of how far you fell from grace?”

The hero looks around him at the ruins of the city. Millions of screams, millions of reminders of how he failed. “I--”

“So when I kill you,” the villain continued, raising his gun, “I will be whole again. Not a single shining little mismatched piece left. No more reminders.”

New York’s golden boy.

The most pure-hearted thing the world had ever seen.

A body on the floor before him, a bullet leaving a patch of blooming red on his chest.

And the villain waits, and waits, for himself to fully accept the darkness, to breathe easy as nothing but pure evil. But there is nothing but pain, lighting through his chest, stabbing him in his lungs, drawing wrecked sobs from his hoarse throat.

Because now instead of light there is guilt, a seed of silver within the black. It burns and burns and burns and there are tears falling on the hero’s body, and it takes him a moment to realize they are his. He tries to draw in air but every inhale sends him wheezing, every exhale a rasping cough. It shouldn’t hurt this much, so why--

He tried. Oh, he tried. But he should have known that nothing could ever be truly whole.

And as he clasps his brother’s hand--the hand that had truly held the knife, that had been drenched in their father’s blood--the city burns behind them.

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review · Tue Jan 20, 2026 10:36 am

Good morning!
I thought to myself: if ppl today are still reading and liking and recommending this story, I want to see it for myself too! And that’s why I’m here ^^

And just from the first paragraph I can tell why :3 Oh I like these descriptions so much!
I also like how you give the lines each character speaks their proper breathing room. It really makes me feel as if they’ve just finished a massive battle and that this is the calm afterwards, the calm before the storm continues.

Ohh and the city is the massive as New York! That really hammers home the scale of things! And ☹ what a sentence, poor guy: “His family’s bones were probably buried somewhere in the ruins behind him.“

Not sure if Mr Villain has thought this through. I highly doubt the hero will beg for his life now. Not after he’s clearly lost everything ☹
Oha and the villain is thinking abt crying? I really like this complexity.

I would think, another one of those shining parts of me is gone and I would ache at the thought of being just another a fallen angel.
I had to highlight this part of the speech because I like it so much but all the other things the villain says are also really poignant. I like this dynamic you’re showing here! Also that he throws this at the hero and the hero just has to look around in answer.


Oh what a twist at the end! No wonder he would fall into this despair spiral because of that long ago decision to take the blame for their father’s death (or maybe that decision was taken from him because ppl couldn’t imagine Hero to do it, so it must have been the evil brother?)

I really like what you did here and I was drawn into the story right from the start! Thanks for sharing!

Upon reading this story, I was immediately impressed by how much power is contained within a shorter piece. The overarching idea that one couldn't live in peace existing as both good and evil was a theme I never really explored myself. It was terribly unique to see it in this context as most everyone I know is composed of both brightness and darkness alike. Additionally, slow development of the hero-villain relationship was very intriguing and their brotherhood revealed at the story's end was quite shocking. Descriptions are also so powerful in this piece and more can be included. It's an impressive story and it can definitely win contests!

thank you so much for your comments! we'll see about the competitions %uD83D%uDE05

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Hi!

I seriously don't know how to form words for this story, because it is so good. I think it fulfills everything that a good story should have. And the plot twist at the end? Oh my god.

Amazing story. I liked how you used this. You didn't say that the villain shot the bullet through the hero, rather you showed it - how a body fell before him, leaving a patch of red on his chest.

I really like your writing style and honestly this story also makes me emotional. Because the villain realizes that guilt surrounds him instead of feeling pure evil. And when he cried? BRO my heart cried then.

You have done an excellent job at characterization, dialogues and the style.

Overall, it is a perfect short story for me :)

Have a great writing day!

Thank you so much! You're too kind <3

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Spearmint
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Ahhh this is such a beautifully written story! The descriptions are so vivid and I love your writing style too! And when I got to the twist at the end, I was like "what-- oh!!" and I just had to go back and read the whole thing over again to see how things connected from this new viewpoint. So, excellent job! ^-^

When I started reading this short story, and saw the words "hero and villain," I was kind of expecting a twist of some sort because I feel like that's the quality of all the writers here on YWS. Like if some kind of stereotype is mentioned, from my experience ywsers subvert it somehow, which is super cool and fun to read. But I totally wasn't expecting the hero to be the villain's brother, and what's more, to be the one who actually killed their father! That was super unexpected and awesome! :]

And as he clasps his brother’s hand--the hand that had truly held the knife, that had been drenched in their father’s blood--the city burns behind them.

There is so much great writing here, from the way the reader can easily visualize this scene to how you reference the beginning of the piece in "the city burns behind them." This powerful and poignant sentence is definitely my favorite part of the story! You should be proud of writing such a dramatic line, and of writing such an amazing story in general C:

All right, going back to the beginning of this piece...
“You have already taken away everything they have.”

“It’s not enough.”

At first I was a little wary of the lack of dialogue tags here, but since the characters are pretty distinct at the beginning, I was able to tell who was saying what. So nice job with that! :>

The thought of crying quickly crosses his mind, but he hasn’t tasted the salt of his own tears since he was accused of running a knife through his father’s stomach years ago.

I'm sorry if this is super picky, but I couldn't find anything else for you to improve on and I wanted to at least give you useful feedback somehow XD Okay, so I think this sentence is a bit mushed together, and maybe you could add a few more pauses to it? For example: "The thought of crying briefly crosses his mind, but he hasn't tasted the salt of his own tears for a while now. Not since he was accused of stabbing his father with a knife, years ago." But this is totally optional, of course; your story is wonderful just as it is c:

...guilt, a seed of silver within the black.

I love how this part describes guilt as silver, which from my experience is often regarded as a shiny and "good" color. Guilt doesn't usually have positive connotations, but the way you portray it here makes me think that the villain's guilt actually proves that he still has a bit of goodness in him. It's cool how you were able to make me see guilt in a different way!

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this short story and I hope you keep writing!! ^-^

Thank you so much for all of your comments! :)



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